Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
• explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
• suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Tolu,

How are you, hope you are doing well? I am writing this letter in response to your letter requesting my advice on getting a job or moving to college. I will choose acquiring a job, due to the fact that it involves a lot of expenses to proceed to the university and you are not wealthy enough to make that kind of expenditure.

Acquiring a position in an industry would grant you the opportunity to have some saving. Additionally, it would also learn a new skill and upgrade your profile in the organisation.

I would like to recommend a obtaining an employment in a construction sector because I noticed the possibility of travelling to Germany is high as there is high demand of employees in the building field with high salaries. Consequently, it would give you the avenue for the broadening your knowledge about the particular course you will study in the future.

Thank you. I hope this cleared your doubt about making an important choice.

Best wishes,

Ella

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt, providing a clear position and supporting reasons. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of why your friend would not enjoy college is brief and focuses primarily on finances rather than the academic experience itself. To reach a higher band, you should expand on your points with more detail or personal context. The suggestion for a job in the construction sector is relevant and well-integrated into the advice provided.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Additionally', 'Consequently', and 'due to the fact that' to link your ideas. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical. For example, the transition between the financial aspect and the suggestion of a construction job could be smoother. Paragraphing is used, but the structure could be more refined to ensure each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed idea. Overall, the message is easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'expenditure', 'organisation', and 'broadening your knowledge'. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'acquiring a job' (better: 'getting a job') and 'a obtaining an employment' (which is grammatically incorrect). You also use 'industry' and 'sector' appropriately. To improve, focus on more natural collocations and avoid repetitive phrasing. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, it lacks the precision and flexibility required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text, such as 'I will choose acquiring a job' (should be 'I would choose to get a job'), 'it would also learn a new skill' (the subject 'it' cannot learn; you mean 'you would learn'), and 'the avenue for the broadening'. These errors do not impede communication, but they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. You should pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles.

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