Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
• explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
• suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear sohi,

I hope your are doing great .I am writing this letter to give you advice that you ask for about whether you should need to go to college for higher education or try to get a job ,therefore, I do like you to go for a job which would be better decision for your self-esteem and as well as for future prosperity .

Moving further, I thought you would not enjoy going to college anymore ;you already completed diploma in medical office assistant course ,so you better be need to find a job which would be beneficial for your financial growth and will help you to get experience regarding what you have studied for. Moreover, getting a job will enhance your digital skills ,communication and leadership skills which are essential to acquire your goal.

Last but not least, I would be the happiest person if you would prefer job in health sector ,because you already done your academic studied in the specific course related to this sector, as yore are familiar with some term of it ,which will make your job convenience at certain level.

I am hoping you to chose it wisely and waiting to see soon .

Your friend

GURPREET KAUR

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the task. You clearly state why college might not be enjoyable, explain the benefits of employment, and suggest a specific sector for your friend. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend, and your position is consistent throughout. To reach a higher band, ensure that your ideas are more fully developed; for instance, when mentioning 'financial growth' or 'digital skills,' providing a brief, concrete example of how these would specifically benefit your friend would add more depth to your argument.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moving further,' 'Moreover,' and 'Last but not least' to guide the reader. However, some of these transitions feel slightly mechanical or forced. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the phrase 'I am hoping you to chose it wisely,' where the object of the verb is slightly ambiguous. Improving the flow between sentences by using a wider variety of linking words would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'self-esteem,' 'prosperity,' and 'essential.' However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and minor errors, such as 'academic studied' instead of 'academic studies' and 'make your job convenience' instead of 'make your job convenient.' These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit your score. To improve, focus on using collocations more accurately and expanding your range of topic-specific vocabulary related to career advice and professional development.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'I hope your are doing great' (your/you are), 'you better be need to find' (incorrect verb structure), and 'as yore are familiar' (spelling). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with spacing around commas and periods. While your meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the text from reaching a higher band. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and basic sentence construction will help improve your accuracy significantly.

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