Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
• explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
• suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Tolu,

How are you, hope you are doing well? I am writing this letter in response to your letter requesting my advice on getting a job or moving to college. I will choose finding a job, due to the fact that it involves a lot of expenses to proceed to the university and you are not wealthy enough to make that kind of expenditure.

Acquiring a position in an industry would grant you the opportunity to have some savings. Additionally, it would also enable you to learn a new skill and upgrade your profile in the organisation.

I would like to recommend obtaining an employment in the construction sector because i noticed the possibility of travelling to Germany is high as there is an increase demand of employees in the building field with high salaries. Consequently, it would give you the avenue for broadening your knowledge about a particular course in the future.

Thank you, I hope this cleared your doubt about making an important choice.

Best wishes,

Ella

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You clearly state why college might not be suitable due to financial constraints, explain the benefits of working, and suggest the construction sector. The tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. To reach a higher band, ensure your arguments are more fully developed. For example, when mentioning the construction sector, you could briefly explain what kind of tasks he might perform or why he specifically has the aptitude for it. Your position is consistent throughout, and the letter fulfills the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Additionally', 'Consequently', and 'due to the fact that' to link your ideas. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical. The paragraphing is appropriate for a letter format. To improve, try to vary your linking words further and ensure that the progression of ideas flows more naturally between sentences. Overall, the message is easy to follow, and the structure supports the purpose of the letter well.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your ideas clearly. Phrases like 'expenditure', 'acquiring a position', and 'broadening your knowledge' are used effectively. There are some minor issues with collocation, such as 'obtaining an employment' (should be 'obtaining employment' or 'getting a job') and 'increase demand' (should be 'increased demand'). While the vocabulary is adequate for the task, incorporating more precise or idiomatic expressions would help elevate your score. The current range is functional and allows for clear communication of your advice.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are some grammatical slips, such as the lowercase 'i' when referring to yourself, and minor errors in article usage or preposition choice (e.g., 'in the building field' vs 'in the building industry'). However, these errors do not impede communication. You have a good grasp of sentence construction, though you should aim for more error-free sentences to reach the higher bands. Ensure you proofread for small slips like subject-verb agreement and capitalization to improve the overall accuracy of your writing.

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