Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
• explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
• suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Raj,

I hope you are doing well. I received your letter that you are seeking for advice whether you should do job or join college for further study. I would suggest you to try for a good job due to various reasons.

The main reason is that you already did graduation and need money for yourself and family needs. If you will go to college for further study it might be very expensive for you at this stage because you are already struggling to manage expenses. Moreover, you will be stressful and not able to get good grades.

A good job can help you and your family to stay happy and enjoy your life in the young age, which is crucial at this movement. Also, you can collect a good experience for better high paid salary job after some years. Furthermore, you can complete your study when you will become stable in your life.

As a recent graduate, you should try for entry level jobs. Also, I would suggest that try to participate in the webinars for better opportunities and new connections.

Take care and write back soon.

With Love,

Manpreet.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly state why college might not be enjoyable, explain the benefits of working, and suggest suitable job types. Your tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend, and your position is consistent throughout. To reach a higher band, ensure your ideas are more fully developed; for instance, when mentioning that college would be 'very expensive,' you could briefly elaborate on the specific financial pressures a recent graduate faces to make your argument more persuasive and detailed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. You use cohesive devices such as 'Moreover,' 'Also,' and 'Furthermore' to link your ideas. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the flow between sentences could be smoother. For example, the transition between discussing financial needs and the stress of college could be better integrated. Paragraphing is used correctly to separate the different points of the task, which helps the reader follow your argument easily.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for this task, such as 'crucial,' 'stable,' and 'opportunities.' However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'seeking for advice' (should be 'seeking advice') and 'at this movement' (should be 'at this moment'). While these errors do not impede communication, they prevent the response from reaching a higher band. Using more precise collocations would enhance the natural flow of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'you already did graduation' (should be 'you have already graduated') and 'you will be stressful' (should be 'you will feel stressed'). Additionally, there are some issues with article usage and verb tense consistency. While these errors are noticeable, they do not significantly hinder the reader's understanding of your message. Increasing your control over complex sentence structures will help improve your score.

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