Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
• explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
• suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Smit,

I hope you are doing well. It has been a while talking to you. I was quite happy to see your email. For your confusions between taking further studies or getting a job, I would recommend you to get a job for your better future.

I believe getting a job would be providing you a lot of experiences and it would definitely help you to learn numerous practical skills. Which you might not able to learn if you will go to college.

Furtherrmore, I have seen you since your childhood enjoying the practical learning than theoratical. Therefore, getting a job would be the best decision.

Moreover, this path will lead you to reducement of your family debt, and provide you afinancial independance.

lastly, I strongly believe you should opt of finance jobs or a job with a leadership role. As you would be a great match, which coud fit well for these roles.

Lastly, write me back your final decision, I will wait for it. Let me know if you need any other help I will be more than pleased to help you in the future. Take care !

Your friend ,

Vaibhavi.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points of the task: explaining why college might not be suitable, why a job is a good idea, and suggesting specific roles. Your position is clear from the beginning, and the tone is appropriate for a letter to a friend. However, the development of your ideas is somewhat limited. For example, while you mention that your friend prefers practical learning, you could have expanded on this by providing a specific example of a past situation where they excelled in a hands-on environment. To reach a higher band, ensure that each point is not just stated but fully supported with illustrative details.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from the introduction to the advice and finally the conclusion. You use some cohesive devices like 'Furthermore', 'Moreover', and 'Lastly' to link your ideas. However, the paragraphing is somewhat fragmented; the body of the letter consists of several very short paragraphs, which disrupts the flow. Additionally, some transitions feel a bit mechanical. To improve, try to group related ideas into more substantial paragraphs and use a wider variety of linking words to create a smoother, more natural connection between your sentences.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'practical skills', 'financial independence', and 'leadership role'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and non-standard phrasing, such as 'reducement of your family debt' (should be 'reduction') and 'opt of finance jobs' (should be 'opt for'). There are also some spelling errors like 'theoratical' and 'afinancial'. While these do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they do indicate a need for more precise control over word forms and spelling to reach a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'It has been a while talking to you' (should be 'since I talked to you'), 'Which you might not able to learn' (fragmented sentence), and 'if you will go to college' (incorrect conditional tense). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the placement of commas and spaces before punctuation marks. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and ensuring that complex structures, such as conditionals, are used with greater accuracy.

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