Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.
Write a letter to this friend. In your letter
- say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
- explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
- suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Dear Kevin,
I hope this letter find you well, and everyone at home happy as well.
I read your letter and i understand your state of condition and confusion so, I would like to share you my opinion. let begin with it is depend on you how you want to build your carrier like if you feel you are not ready for job and want to improve yourself so you can choose to study so you will more focused on carrier and if you want to grow your skill with practical knowledge and experience with money you can choose job.
As per my point of view you should go with job. It gives you financial independence with real knowledge and you can do your further education parallel to job and also you can join latter.
yours lovely,
Hardik
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to address the task requirements adequately. While you mention the choice between college and work, you do not explain why your friend would not enjoy college, nor do you suggest specific types of jobs suitable for them. Furthermore, the response is significantly under the 150-word minimum requirement, which negatively impacts the development of your ideas. To improve, you must ensure each bullet point in the prompt is addressed with specific, extended explanations. Currently, the ideas are too brief and lack the necessary detail to fully satisfy the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The letter lacks a clear structure. While there is a greeting and a closing, the body paragraphs are poorly organized and do not follow a logical progression. The use of cohesive devices is very limited, making the transition between ideas feel abrupt and disjointed. For example, the jump from discussing college to job benefits is not managed with effective linking words. To improve, you should use clear paragraphing to separate your points and incorporate a wider range of cohesive devices such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'on the other hand' to guide the reader through your argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is quite basic and contains several inaccuracies. For instance, you use 'state of condition' and 'share you my opinion' which are unnatural collocations. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'carrier' instead of 'career' and 'latter' instead of 'later'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas clearly. To reach a higher band, focus on learning common collocations and using more precise terminology related to professional and academic choices. Expanding your vocabulary will help you convey your thoughts with greater accuracy and sophistication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('I hope this letter find you well'), missing articles, and incorrect sentence structures ('let begin with it is depend on you'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and capitalization. You rely mostly on simple sentence structures, and attempts at more complex sentences are often grammatically flawed. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and correct verb tenses before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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