Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
• explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
• suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear kiran,

I hope you will good, I got a letter from you , where you said me you try to get jobs. I believe that you should get a job and collage is also important for further study.

I think she is worried about their responsiiblity. In their family, no one can earn money for life reqirment. It is necessary for doing jobs.

I thin job is a good idea for him because they can do further study. However, they can feel their college fees by the help of jobs.

In my country, there are several jobs availble for a girls like as, countent, reseptionest, nurse, teacher and so on. Accoring to me teaching is a good job for him because she is well mainteind in teaching ability.

your best friend

jaspreet kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address all parts of the prompt, including advising against college, explaining why a job is beneficial, and suggesting suitable jobs. However, the development of ideas is limited, and the text falls short of the 150-word minimum, containing only 134 words. Furthermore, there are noticeable shifts in pronouns and confusion regarding the persona and the friend's situation, such as referring to the friend as 'he/she' and 'they', which obscures the clarity of communication. Because the response is under-length and lacks full development of ideas, it fits best within the Band 5 descriptors for Task Achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter lacks clear paragraphing and logical progression, making it difficult to follow at times. While there are some basic cohesive devices used, referencing is frequently unclear, notably with the pronoun shifts ('he/she', 'they', 'she') which create confusion about who the writer is referring to. The layout follows a basic letter format with a greeting and sign-off, but the overall internal organization is faulty and mechanical. This performance aligns with the Band 5 descriptor for Coherence and Cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The student uses a basic and repetitive vocabulary with several noticeable errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'collage' instead of 'college', 'reqirment' instead of 'requirement', 'countent' instead of 'accountant', and 'reseptionest' instead of 'receptionist'. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey a basic message about jobs and studying, these lexical errors and limited range restrict the score to a Band 5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response shows a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent errors. Examples include 'I hope you will good', 'where you said me you try to get jobs', and 'they can feel their college fees by the help of jobs' (intended as 'pay'). Errors in verb tenses, prepositions, and word forms occur frequently and occasionally cause difficulty for the reader, though the general meaning remains partially decipherable. These features reflect the Band 5 descriptors.

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