Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
• explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
• suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Dear Raju,

I hope you are doing well.I am writing to advice regarding about try to get a work or went to collage.he should get a job. he not enjoy going to collage

because his house financial condition is very poor and also his father helth condition is not well.now i told my friend job is good idea rather than a study now his mind not accepts more study he can job start his family condition is some good .

I suggest him welder job is good option and this kind of job sellary is so good you very active and strong person you improve your family condition very fast and now your family is very happy and confident noe i suggested you work is good option

Best wishes,

ketu

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response attempts to cover all parts of the prompt, mentioning reasons why college is unsuitable, why a job is a good idea, and suggesting a welder job. However, the task achievement is significantly hindered by two main issues: first, the writing is under the required 150-word minimum, containing only 130 words; second, the perspective and pronoun use are extremely confused. Although the prompt asks the student to write to a friend advising them, the student frequently switches to the third person ("he should get a job", "now i told my friend") and then addresses the friend directly ("you very active and strong person"). This lack of a clear persona and under-length response restrict the task score to Band 4.5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The letter lacks proper paragraphing, presented instead as a single block of text which makes the progression of ideas difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are largely absent, and the abrupt transitions between sentences cause confusion—for instance, jumping from financial conditions directly to suggesting a welder job without linking phrases. Pronoun referencing is faulty throughout, notably when the writer shifts confusingly between third-person descriptions ("his house financial condition") and direct address ("now i suggested you work"). This results in a disjointed structure that limits coherence to a Band 4.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive (e.g., repeating words like 'job', 'good', 'family', 'condition'). There are numerous word choice and collocation errors, such as 'house financial condition', 'helth condition is not well', and 'sellary is so good'. Furthermore, spelling errors such as 'advice' instead of 'advise', 'collage' instead of 'college', 'helth', and 'sellary' occur throughout the text. The range of vocabulary is barely adequate to convey the simple ideas, placing this performance at Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text consists largely of simple sentences strung together with commas (run-on sentences), such as 'he should get a job. he not enjoy going to collage because his house financial condition is very poor and also his father helth condition is not well.' There is a complete lack of accurate complex sentence structures, and basic verb forms and auxiliary verbs are frequently missing (e.g., 'he can job start', 'welder job is good option'). Frequent grammatical errors cause strain and confusion for the reader, justifying a Band 4.0.

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