Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.
Write a letter to this friend. In your letter
- say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
- explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
- suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear ................. ,
Student answer (Band 4.0)
DEAR LAKHWINDER
I HOPE YOU AND YOUR FAMILY WELL THERE FIRST THANKS YOU TRUST ME BECAUSE YOU TAKE MY ADVICE SEROUS MATTER . IN MY OPNION YOU TAKE JOB.
I TALK WITH CLIER VISON YOU ARE NOT ENJOY YOUR COLLEGE LIFE BECAUSE YOUR FAMILEY FINASIOL SATUATION NOT GOOD COLLEGE.SO COLLEGE STUDY VERY COSTALI
I SUGEST YOU TAKE JOB BECAUSE YOU AREN MONEY AND HELP OURFAMILYAND IMPROV YOUR FANISIOLSTATUS AND YOU CONTENU YOUR STUDY PART TIME.
YOUR LEVE NEAR FOGLE POINT SO THERE ARE MANNY FICTORY SO YOU HAVE MORE OPERTUNTIES
YOUR FRIEND
SUKHDEEP SINGH
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response attempts to cover all parts of the task prompt, including why your friend would not enjoy college, why getting a job is a good idea, and suggesting suitable types of work near Fogle Point. However, the ideas are severely underdeveloped due to the extremely limited word count of 94 words, falling well short of the 150-word minimum requirement. Key points like family financial situation and factory opportunities are mentioned but lack sufficient elaboration and extension. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, which heavily impacts this criterion.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The letter lacks proper paragraphing, presented mostly as a single block of text with erratic indentation and capitalization. Cohesive devices are minimal, relying on basic transitions like 'SO' and 'BECAUSE' which are often overused and written in uppercase. While there is a rudimentary logical progression from college costs to job suggestions, the absence of clear structural layout and paragraph breaks results in a choppy and disjointed flow, making the progression difficult to follow at times.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive. There are numerous severe spelling and word choice errors, such as 'OPNION' for opinion, 'CLIER VISON' for clear vision, 'FINASIOL SATUATION' for financial situation, 'COSTALI' for costly, 'AREN' for earn, and 'OPERTUNTIES' for opportunities. These frequent lexical errors and non-standard spellings strain the reader and obscure meaning in several places, keeping the score down within the lower bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical structures attempted are very simple, featuring a lack of complex sentences and frequent omission of auxiliary verbs and articles, as seen in 'YOU TAKE JOB' and 'FAMILY FINASIOL SATUATION NOT GOOD COLLEGE'. Punctuation is largely absent or misused, with erratic capitalization throughout the entire response. Errors in grammar and tense are frequent and pervasive, causing significant difficulty for the reader to parse the intended meaning.
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