Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
• explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
• suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Piya,

I hope that you are doing great.As you were asking for my advice,I would say that you are not enjoying in your college as many of your classmates already got jobs .There are no more new interesting practical classes also.You can complete your all cources online so there is no need to go to college physically.I understand your personal reasons as well.I think you should get a good job by using your stitching skills.There are even many jobs like content creator,editing, online business promotion videos etc.In my opinion you can try for these jobs.Even,new zudio mall has been opened in batala city.You can also apply for the job of cash collector.By appling for these jobs you can easily get a good amount for yourself.Even you can also give online classes to the students of schools .You can earn good amount of money by giving offline tuitions as well.I hope iy lt will help you.Write a lettler bavk to me as well.Take care,my girl.lots of love to you.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You give a clear recommendation to seek work and address all three points: you explain that college may feel uninteresting, mention practical reasons for working, and suggest several possible jobs. The ideas about using stitching skills, applying to the new mall, and offering tuition are relevant to your friend. However, the reasons she might not enjoy college are brief and partly unclear: classmates having jobs and a lack of practical classes are mentioned but not explained in relation to her interests. Some job suggestions, such as content creation and cash collection, would be more convincing if linked to her abilities or preferences. Develop these points with a little more personal explanation and support so the advice feels tailored throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The letter follows a broadly sensible order: you introduce your advice, discuss college, recommend work, and close warmly. The friendly opening and sign-off suit the audience. However, the response is presented as one long paragraph, so the shift from college to job options is difficult to follow. Linking words such as “Even” recur several times and do not always show a clear relationship between ideas. For example, the list of jobs moves quickly from stitching to content creation, mall work, and tuition. Use separate paragraphs for the college explanation and employment suggestions, and connect examples with clearer transitions such as “Another option” or “This would suit you because…”.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main advice, including relevant terms such as “stitching skills,” “content creator,” “online business promotion,” and “cash collector.” These show some range beyond very basic language. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, which makes parts less natural: “get a good amount for yourself” and “give online classes to the students of schools” could be expressed more precisely. There are also spelling errors, including “cources,” “appling,” and “lettler,” and “iy lt” appears to be a typing error. Check spelling carefully and choose more natural phrases for earning money and teaching. This would make your meaning smoother and more professional while retaining the friendly tone.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt a mixture of simple statements and longer sentences, and the main message is generally understandable. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly in verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries. For example, “you are not enjoying in your college” needs a more suitable verb construction, while “you can complete your all cources online” has an awkward determiner order. Several sentences run together without spaces after full stops or commas, as in “great.As” and “advice,I”; this affects punctuation and readability. Practise forming accurate advice sentences and separating clauses with appropriate punctuation. More consistent control of these patterns would help your varied sentence attempts read clearly.

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