Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
• explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
• suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Hello, my friend i received your letter yesterday. I hope that you are in good health. You asked me to advise you about you future. In my opinion you should choose the job. You belongs to a poor family and you need money more than study. So, I suggests you to do a job. As i know you, you have many interst in computer skills. I advice you to do a letter typing job. I knew a copmany who is hiring people in typing job. I know that this skill is very easy for you and you will enjoy it. If you want to apply in it then tell me as soon as possible. I will send you the link for apply. The other mojor benefit of this job is that it gives you bonus on various festivals. I also give the review of this company for its employs they are satisfied with it.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You make your recommendation clear: “you should choose the job,” and you give relevant reasons, including the need for money and your friend’s interest in computer skills. You also suggest a specific role—typing—and mention a possible employer and a benefit. However, the task is only partly addressed: you do not explain why your friend would not enjoy college, and the reasons for choosing work are brief or unclear. For example, “you need money more than study” is asserted rather than developed, while the company and bonus details do not fully explain why employment suits your friend. Add a clear point about college and expand the job-related reasons with specific support.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The ideas follow a broadly understandable order: you give your advice, explain a financial reason, suggest a typing job, and offer to send an application link. Basic connectors such as “So,” “If,” and “also” help show relationships between points. However, the response is presented as one continuous block, so the reader has little visual guidance, and the progression becomes unclear near the end: “I also give the review of this company for its employs they are satisfied with it” combines several ideas without a clear link. Some references, such as “it” in “apply in it,” are also difficult to follow. Use short paragraphs for the advice, reasons, and job suggestions, and connect each point more clearly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main idea, including “computer skills,” “typing job,” “hiring,” “bonus,” and “apply.” These choices make the suggested work reasonably clear. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, spelling, and collocation errors make parts of the letter difficult to understand, such as “interst,” “copmany,” “mojor,” and “review of this company.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “letter typing job” and “bonus on various festivals.” Aim for more precise, natural expressions and check spelling carefully. For example, you could describe a “data-entry position” and say that the company “offers bonuses during holiday periods.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You communicate your main recommendation using mostly short, direct sentences, and you attempt a conditional structure in “If you want to apply … then tell me.” However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and frequent errors in agreement, verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries affect accuracy. Examples include “You belongs,” “I suggests,” and “I advice,” where the verb forms do not agree with the subject, as well as “I knew a company who is hiring,” which has an inconsistent tense and an unsuitable relative pronoun. The final sentence also runs several clauses together. Practise accurate present-tense forms and use full stops or conjunctions to separate complete ideas.

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