Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
• explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
• suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Jass,

I hope you are doing well, I heard you are confused between doing a job and study in college. Well,according to me you should do job because I vividly remember you did not like study several hours.In college you would pay full attention for exam and assignments which is very difficult for you also there are some time study takes two to three years.

Job would be best for you. If you doing work then you can earn money and feel independent.Moreover, as a working employee you can build your resume more strong which helpful for future job.

You can get job in many platforms like bank, shop and an office.As I know you are good in talking with people.So, you can work in customer services centre.

I hope it would best for you.Make early decision and give me response as soon as possible.

Take care!

Best wishes,

Manpreet

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points and make your recommendation clear: you explain that college would involve long study hours, exams and assignments, give reasons to work such as earning money and gaining independence, and suggest jobs in a bank, shop, office or customer service. The advice is relevant to your friend, especially the link between being good at talking to people and customer service. Some points are less fully developed: for example, you mention that college may take two or three years but do not explain why that would be a drawback for Jass, and the job options are listed rather than compared or explained. A little more personal support for these ideas would make the advice more convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall shape: an opening, separate sections for the college and job advice, and a friendly closing. The progression from your recommendation to its reasons and then to suitable work is easy to follow. You also use linking expressions such as “Moreover” and “So” to connect ideas. However, some connections feel mechanical or unclear, particularly “Well, according to me” and “I hope it would best for you.” The job suggestions could be grouped and linked more smoothly to your friend’s strengths, rather than presented as a quick list. Use paragraph breaks consistently and make transitions more natural to strengthen the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the main advice, and phrases such as “feel independent,” “build your resume” and “customer services centre” show attempts to use topic-related language. The meaning is generally understandable, but several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural: “study several hours,” “pay full attention for exam,” “build your resume more strong,” and “job in many platforms.” These errors make parts of the letter less fluent and precise. Aim for natural combinations such as “study for several hours,” “focus on exams,” “strengthen your résumé,” and “find work in different sectors.” A broader range of precise employment and education vocabulary would also help you express your reasons more flexibly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a reason clause in “because I vividly remember…” and a conditional idea beginning “If you doing work…”. The overall message remains understandable, but grammatical control is uneven, with errors in verb forms, sentence boundaries, articles and punctuation. For example, “If you doing work” needs a correctly formed conditional, while “I hope you are doing well, I heard…” joins two complete thoughts with only a comma. “There are some time study takes…” also needs a clearer structure. Practise accurate conditional forms and use full stops or conjunctions to separate clauses. More consistently correct sentences, alongside varied structures, would make the letter easier to read.

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