Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
• explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
• suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear friend,

Hope you’re doing splendidly! I have received your letter stating that you have a query whether to attend the college or start working.

Although attending the college can help you to obtain high paying jobs, you have to for pay high tuition expenses. Instead of going to college, you should try to secure employment, which will help you to gain experience and upgrade your CV. By working practically, you can not only inculcate new skills but also improve your ability to pursue field tasks.

Having a good background in medical science, you should try to find job as a medical office assistant, which will help you to gather knowledge related to dealing with patients, customer services and assisting doctors in clinical tasks. Once you will build experience, you can join further studies later because you will be aware about system till then.

If you face any problem in the future you can contact me.

Thanks & Regards

Nikhil

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a clear recommendation to seek employment and address all three requested points. The reason college may not suit your friend is linked to high tuition costs, while the job advice is supported by gaining experience, developing skills and improving a CV. You also suggest a specific role—medical office assistant—and connect it to your friend’s medical-science background. However, the explanation of why your friend would not enjoy college is less developed: cost is a practical drawback, but you do not explain what about college itself might be unenjoyable. The job benefits and suitability of the role could also be expanded with a more personal example. Developing these ideas more fully would make the advice more convincing and complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a coherent overall arrangement: you acknowledge the friend’s question, give your recommendation and reasons, suggest a suitable job, and close politely. The progression from college costs to employment benefits and then to a medical-office role is easy to follow. Linking phrases such as “Although,” “Instead of,” and “Once” help connect ideas, and the paragraphs broadly separate the main points. To make the organisation more polished, use clearer paragraph breaks and a more natural transition into the job suggestion. The phrase “Once you will build experience” also makes the relationship between ideas less smooth. Your closing is understandable, though a conventional sign-off would make the letter feel more complete and cohesive.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for giving advice, including “secure employment,” “gain experience,” “upgrade your CV,” and “clinical tasks.” These choices communicate the main ideas, and the medical vocabulary helps make the suggested role specific. You also attempt less common expressions such as “inculcate new skills,” but this collocation is unnatural; “develop new skills” would be more idiomatic. Other phrases, including “high paying jobs,” “gather knowledge,” and “aware about system,” show that word choice and collocation are not always controlled. The meaning remains clear, but more natural phrasing would make the letter sound fluent and appropriately informal. Aim for precise, familiar collocations rather than choosing vocabulary mainly for formality.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including the contrast in “Although attending the college…” and the paired structure “not only… but also.” Most sentences communicate your meaning, and the errors do not generally prevent understanding. Some grammatical inaccuracies remain. For example, “you have to for pay” has an unnecessary preposition, and “Once you will build experience” uses an incorrect tense pattern after “once.” Articles and prepositions also need attention in “attend the college” and “find job.” The sentence beginning “Having a good background…” is a useful attempt at a more complex structure, but its long list would benefit from clearer grammatical parallelism. Proofreading these patterns would improve accuracy while preserving your sentence variety.

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