Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
• explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
• suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mohit,

I hope that you are well. I am writing to let you know that you should find a job rather than going to college.

As I know that you have completed your bachelor of arts this year, I suggest you that you should now leave your study because your family is not able to support you any more. Today, the cost of education is so high.

I believe that having a job is a best option for you because you will earn some amount of money which can help you to afford rent, medicine, and electricity or mobile bills. In addition, you can save a small amount your income for your future and emergency time. Therefore, I think that being employed is the best idea for you to be self independent.

I would reccommend you to find a job in the offices and banks because you have a proper knowledge and skills of using computers and different type of softwares. You can also work under stress and pressure, so these fields would be suitable for you.

I look forward to hearing form you.

Best of luck,

Sandeep

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

Your position is clear from the opening: you recommend finding a job rather than going to college. You also address all three requested points: you mention the financial pressure on his family, explain that earnings could cover living costs and support savings, and suggest work in offices or banks. However, the reason he might not enjoy college is not really explained; the response focuses on affordability and says he should leave his studies, rather than describing why college would not suit him. The job benefits and suitable roles are relevant, but the suggestions are brief and rely on general claims about computer skills and working under pressure. Develop these points with more specific reasons and examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter is organised into clear paragraphs, with each paragraph serving a distinct purpose: advice, financial reasons, benefits of employment, and job suggestions. The progression is easy to follow, and linking expressions such as “In addition” and “Therefore” help show how the ideas relate. The opening and closing also suit a friendly letter. This is a coherent overall arrangement, though some connections feel formulaic, and the reference to “these fields” could be more precise about which roles you mean. To strengthen the flow further, connect the college point directly to the job recommendation and use a little more varied linking rather than relying mainly on explicit transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main advice, including “afford,” “emergency,” “employed,” and “suitable.” The language is generally understandable, but several word-choice, collocation, and spelling problems make the expression less natural: “a best option,” “a small amount your income,” “self independent,” and “different type of softwares.” “Reccommend” and “form” are also spelling errors. These issues do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, but they show that control of common phrases is not yet consistent. Aim to use natural combinations such as “save part of your income” and “become financially independent,” and check spelling and plural forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including a reason clause with “because” and a result introduced by “so.” Most sentences communicate your meaning, and the overall message remains clear. Some grammatical errors are present, particularly in sentence patterns and articles: “I suggest you that you should” should be “I suggest that you,” while “a best option” needs “the best option.” In “a small amount your income,” a preposition is missing (“of”). The sentence beginning “As I know that…” is also awkwardly constructed. Practise accurate verb patterns after “suggest” and review articles and prepositions; this will make your advice sound more controlled without changing its friendly tone.

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