Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
• explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
• suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Aman,

I am writing this letter to find a job in these places where you have interest such as food courts, warehouses, stores and many more.

Firstly, aman want to do her part time studies because in her third semester she failed one course. But she would not enjoy in the college as she lost her old friends and she will not enjoy the comapny of new friends. Moreover, due to some college issue cafeteria will close so she will not enjoy her food

Secondly, she has a keen interest to do job. she will learn more from doing job and earn for her basic necessities like do groceries and paying college fees.

Thirdly, she loves to do cooking a enjoy to make different meals and learn about different thing which help her to her bright future when she interact with different individuls it will not only improve her communication skills but only boost her confidence.

Yours Best wishes,

warsha.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear recommendation in favour of employment and include reasons related to college, earning money, and possible job types. However, the response only partly fulfils the task because some points are unclear or insufficiently explained. For example, the opening says you are writing “to find a job,” rather than advising Aman, and the college concerns about losing friends and the cafeteria closing are not clearly connected to why she would dislike studying. You mention food courts, warehouses, and stores, but do not explain which roles would suit her or why. Develop each required point with a direct explanation—for instance, connect her interest in cooking to a café or kitchen role—and keep the advice consistently addressed to your friend.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The letter has a recognisable structure, with an opening, three points introduced by “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “Thirdly,” and a closing. These markers help the reader identify the main sections. However, the progression is not always clear: the opening lists workplaces before establishing the purpose, and the first paragraph shifts between studies, friends, and the cafeteria without showing how the ideas relate. The repeated sequencing words also make the organisation feel mechanical, while the final paragraph combines cooking, learning, communication, and confidence in one long chain. Use clearer links between each reason and its supporting detail, and separate distinct ideas into sentences so the letter develops more smoothly.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough everyday vocabulary to communicate the general advice, including “basic necessities,” “keen interest,” “communication skills,” and “boost her confidence.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to follow. “Find a job in these places where you have interest” is not a natural way to introduce advice, and “enjoy the company of new friends” is awkward in this context. There are also spelling errors such as “comapny” and “individuls,” alongside inconsistent capitalisation of “Aman.” Choose more precise expressions for employment and study, check spelling carefully, and use natural combinations such as “apply for a job” and “gain work experience.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a reason clause with “because” and a contrast with “but.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences hard to interpret. The perspective shifts between “you,” “Aman,” and “she,” as in “aman want to do her part time studies,” so it is unclear who is being discussed. There are also problems with verb forms and sentence construction in “she loves to do cooking a enjoy to make different meals” and “it will help her to her bright future.” Use consistent second-person address in a personal letter, check subject–verb agreement, and divide long sentences into shorter, complete clauses with accurate punctuation.

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