Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
• explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
• suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Hi Harman

I hope you are doing well. I received your letter this weekend and I am more than happy to advice you whether you should get admission in college or get a job.

I would suggest to find a job related to your interested field because if you choose to go to college you will find it boring. You already have enough experience about computers and you will choose computer majors in your studies.

Thus, you are really interested in computers and you have deep knowledge about computer software. Fortunately, you get chance to work at your uncle's computer shop during summer vacations every year which helped you to get enough experience.

There are lots of suitable job in job market which you could apply such as software engineer, website designer and many more. I would like you to start your career rather than spending time on things you already know.

I hope you will consider my advice and I will be happy and support you on whatever your decision will be.

Yours faithfully

Kiran

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You clearly recommend that Harman get a job, and you address all three requested points: you explain that college may feel boring, connect work to his computer knowledge and experience at his uncle’s shop, and suggest roles such as software engineer and website designer. These relevant details meet the task well. The reasons are not equally developed, however: the claim that college would be boring is asserted rather than explained, and the job suggestions would be more convincing if linked to his skills or interests individually. The response already shows a clear, relevant position; to strengthen it further, add specific support and make the advice feel more tailored to your friend’s circumstances.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter follows a sensible overall sequence: greeting and purpose, reasons for choosing work, possible jobs, and a closing. The ideas are generally easy to follow, and phrases such as “Thus” and “I hope” help signal relationships and the ending. However, the middle section repeats the point that Harman is interested in and knowledgeable about computers, while the transition from college being boring to his experience at the shop is somewhat abrupt. Paragraphing is also limited, so the different parts of the advice do not stand out clearly. Group the college explanation, work-related benefits, and job suggestions into distinct paragraphs, and use references or transitions that connect each point without repeating it.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the advice and include relevant terms such as “computer software,” “computer shop,” “software engineer,” and “website designer.” These choices make the topic clear, and the tone is generally friendly. Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or repetitive, though, which limits precision: “advice you” should be “advise you,” “get admission in college” is unnatural in this context, and “your interested field” is not the correct form. “Job” and “experience” also recur without much variation. Aim for natural phrases such as “enrol in college,” “field of interest,” and “gain practical experience,” while checking word forms and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including a conditional explanation beginning “if you choose to go to college” and a relative clause in “which helped you to get enough experience.” The message remains understandable throughout. Some grammatical errors persist, particularly with articles, agreement, and verb forms: “There are lots of suitable job” needs a plural noun, and “whatever your decision will be” would be more natural as “whatever your decision is.” The sentence beginning “I would suggest to find” also needs a different grammatical pattern, such as “I would suggest finding.” Review these structures and check punctuation and sentence boundaries to make the writing more consistently accurate.

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