Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
• explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
• suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Parthavi,

I hope you are doing well. I know it is a tough choice to make whether you are fully ready to get exposure to the real working world or want to work on yourself and make yourself better. But as of my advice to you will be that you are ready to get a job.

You have done your master's in hospitality and management. You already have the potential to get a good job and gain experience. If you go to college for further studies, you will not know how to deal with real things. Secondly, you are already struggling with all your finances and getting a job can solve it. Moreover, you can get into the industry as an assistant manager or simply as part of the crew. Subsequently, this will help you gain expertise and move further in your career.

I wish you good luck and hope to see you confident in all you do,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Your position is clear: you advise Parthavi to get a job, and you address all three requested points. You explain that further college study may leave her unsure how to handle “real things,” and that employment could ease her financial difficulties. You also suggest relevant hospitality roles, including assistant manager and crew member. These are useful, task-focused ideas, but the reasons she would not enjoy college are less fully explained than the benefits of working; for example, clarify what aspects of studying would not suit her. The job suggestions could also be linked more specifically to her interests or strengths. Developing these points with a little more personal detail would make the advice more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a clear overall progression: you open by acknowledging the decision, give your recommendation and reasons, then close with good wishes. Paragraphing helps separate the introduction from the main advice. Linking expressions such as “Secondly,” “Moreover,” and “Subsequently” make the sequence easy to follow, although their use feels somewhat mechanical, and “Subsequently” does not clearly show the relationship between the job and career progress. The final paragraph would also feel more complete with a direct sign-off, such as “Best wishes,” followed by your name. To strengthen cohesion, connect ideas more naturally and use pronouns or short transitions that make the links between reasons explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for giving advice and discussing work, including “potential,” “gain experience,” “finances,” and “expertise.” The hospitality context is reflected in the specific job titles, which makes the suggestions relevant. Some expressions are imprecise or unnatural, however: “get exposure to the real working world” is less idiomatic than “gain experience in the workplace,” and “deal with real things” is vague. “Work on yourself and make yourself better” is also repetitive and could be expressed more precisely as developing further qualifications or skills. These choices do not prevent understanding, but more natural collocations and specific wording would make the letter sound more fluent and personal.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including conditional phrasing in “If you go to college for further studies” and a longer sentence explaining how work could support career progress. Most of the message remains understandable, but some grammatical choices are inaccurate. In “as of my advice to you will be,” the introductory phrase does not fit the sentence structure; write “My advice to you is that…” instead. “Whether you are fully ready … or want to work on yourself” also shifts awkwardly between structures, and “You have done your master's” would be more natural as “You have completed your master’s degree.” Review sentence construction and maintain parallel forms when presenting alternatives.

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