Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

• say why he/she would not enjoy going to college
• explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her
• suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Anand,

How are doing? I am writing this letter to suggest you to try to get a job.

I am over the moon after hearing that you have been completed your graduation with a good percentage. and I heard that you wanted to continue your further studies in the same university. i think you would not enjoy your life in college by seeing the financial conditions of your family. However, I would like to advice you to attain a good job, because your your education should help your economic situation.

There are many areas where you can get a job, I would suggest you some paricular fields to obtain job depended upon your qualification. There is an accountant job available in the sugar factory, there is a supervisor vacancy in another factory and there other places where you can have suitable jobs.

I am delighted to provide more information regarding your job trails. wishing you all the best for your future.

with best wishes

Kumar Babu Maddala

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you recommend that Anand work rather than continue studying, and you give relevant reasons and job examples. The financial situation of his family and the possibility of improving it explain why college may not suit him, while the accountant and supervisor vacancies address suitable work. However, the reason he would not enjoy college is mainly presented as a financial concern, rather than explaining how college itself might be unenjoyable. The job benefits are also stated briefly, and the suggested roles are not linked to Anand’s particular qualifications or interests. Develop these points with specific details, such as how earning now could help his family and why a particular role would suit him.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a generally coherent structure: an opening states its purpose, the middle paragraphs discuss study and employment, and the closing offers further help and good wishes. Paragraphing helps the reader follow the main topics, and connectors such as “However” and “because” show some relationships between ideas. At times, though, the progression within a paragraph is less clear: the sentence about graduation and further study moves quickly to family finances without fully explaining the connection. The list of vacancies also reads as a sequence of examples rather than a developed recommendation. Use clearer links between each reason and your advice, and make the final paragraph’s offer of help more specific.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a range of relevant expressions, including “over the moon,” “financial conditions,” “economic situation,” and “suitable jobs,” so the message is understandable and appropriate to the topic. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, which limits precision: “suggest you to try,” “attain a good job,” and “job trails” do not express the intended meaning naturally. There are also spelling errors such as “paricular,” and “graduation with a good percentage” is not idiomatic in this context. Aim for straightforward, accurate phrases such as “advise you to look for work,” “find a suitable job,” and “job opportunities,” and check spelling before sending the letter.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, for example, “I think you would not enjoy your life in college by seeing the financial conditions of your family.” The main message remains understandable, but errors in verb forms, sentence construction, and punctuation are frequent enough to make some sentences awkward. Examples include “How are doing?” (missing subject), “you have been completed” (incorrect verb form), and “I would like to advice you” (incorrect grammatical form). The sentence beginning “There are many areas…” also joins a comma splice to a list of vacancies. Practise forming questions and using verb patterns after “advise,” and separate complete ideas with full stops or suitable conjunctions. Check capitalisation at sentence beginnings as well.

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