Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

Write a letter to this friend. In your letter

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear ................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear John,

How have you been? I hope everything is going well with you and your family. I am writing tell you about you can go with job instant of study. Which i think you will find intresting.

To begin with, I do not think you would enjoy going to collage because you have never been intrested in acedemic studies.Moreover, you might find difficult to concentrate on theoretical subject for several hours everyday. Therfore, I believe that studying further would be more stressful for you.

Apart from that, getting a job would be a better option because you can gain practical experiance and become financially independent.Beside, you would be able to earn money while developing your professional skills, which could help you build a successdul career in the future

In addition, i would recommend working as a sales assistant, customer service representative. These position would allow you to improve your communication skills and gain valuble work experience.

Anyway, I would love to hear what you think so, write back when you get a chance. Hopefully, we will be able to meet soon and catch up, peoperly.

Best wisher,

Dhruvil

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response6.5
Coherence and Cohesion7.0
Lexical Resource5.5
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.5
Overall6.0

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points and make your recommendation clear: you think John should work rather than attend college. The reasons are relevant, especially that he may struggle with theoretical study and could gain practical experience and financial independence through employment. You also suggest two suitable roles, sales assistant and customer service representative. This covers the task well, but some ideas are only briefly explained. For example, you say these roles would improve his communication skills, but do not connect them to his interests or strengths. The explanation of why college would not suit him is also quite general. Adding a specific example about his preferences or abilities would make the advice more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter has a clear progression: an opening, a paragraph about college, one about the benefits of work, a job suggestion, and a friendly closing. Linking expressions such as “To begin with,” “Apart from that,” and “In addition” help the reader follow the points, and the tone is appropriate for a friend. The organisation is effective overall, though some transitions feel formulaic, and the opening sentence is difficult to follow, which briefly obscures the purpose of the letter. The final paragraph also combines the invitation to reply with the hope of meeting, but remains understandable. To strengthen cohesion further, use a more direct opening and vary links by showing the relationship between ideas rather than relying mainly on paragraph-starting phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “theoretical subject,” “financially independent,” “professional skills,” and “communication skills.” These choices convey the main ideas, and the range is adequate for giving personal advice. However, noticeable spelling errors and inaccurate word forms reduce precision: “collage,” “intrested,” “experiance,” “successdul,” and “valuble” should be corrected. Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “go with job instant of study” and “these position.” The reader can generally understand your meaning, but careful proofreading and more natural collocations would improve control. Aim to use straightforward, accurate phrases rather than attempting expressions whose meaning or form is uncertain.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including the clause “which could help you build a … career in the future.” Most of the message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors affect clarity and control. For example, “I am writing tell you” needs an infinitive marker (“to tell”), while “you might find difficult to concentrate” needs an object (“it”) before “difficult.” The sentence beginning “Which i think…” is a fragment, and “These position would allow” has a plural agreement error. There are also punctuation and capitalisation issues, such as the missing full stop before “Beside” and lowercase “i.” Review sentence boundaries, agreement, and basic clause patterns to make your varied structures more consistently accurate.

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