Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph illustrate the prices of the rare metals copper, zinc also nickel. this graph shows to two metals which upside's and one is downwards the nickel was high in the graph at the month of January but nickel was downward at the of june furthermore the nickel was high in the prices again in july .In july to end of September the prices were stable .But the prices of nickel reduced in October. after october the prices were slightly increase . on the other way the pricese of zinc was high in the February but after some time the prices were decrease in the march and thr reduced after every month but in june also October the prices were badly reduced also in November and December the prices were increased.the copper was stable in all months expect the june mostly zinc and copper were same prices also same ratio . accordingly to this line graph the june month where the prices of all metals were reduced.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the three metals and report several relevant movements, including nickel’s high January figure, its sharp fall in June, and the recovery in November and December. You also note that copper changes relatively little and that all three metals fall in June. However, the account is only partial: there is no clear, accurate overview of the main pattern, and some comparisons are vague or incorrect. For example, nickel was not high in July; it remained below zero from July to October. Zinc also did not decrease every month after February, since it rose from February to March. To strengthen the response, summarise the overall contrast—nickel fluctuated most, while copper was comparatively stable—and select a few accurate turning points and comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows a broadly understandable order, moving from nickel to zinc and then copper, and words such as “furthermore,” “but,” and “after” attempt to connect events. However, the ideas are crowded into one paragraph and the progression is difficult to follow. Several transitions are unclear or repetitive, such as “on the other way,” while the final sentence introduces a general point without developing it. References such as “the prices” are sometimes ambiguous because the reader must infer which metal is meant. Organise the report into a short introduction, an overview, and one or two detail paragraphs. Use clear comparisons and time markers so each sentence has an obvious connection to the previous one.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing trends, including “stable,” “reduced,” “increased,” and “downwards,” so the reader can identify the general subject. However, the range is limited and several choices or combinations are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the meaning harder to follow. For instance, “the prices were badly reduced” is not a natural way to describe a fall on a graph, and “same ratio” does not clearly express a comparison in price changes. There are also spelling errors such as “pricese” and “thr.” Build a more precise set of trend expressions and use them consistently, for example “fell sharply,” “remained stable,” and “recovered slightly.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to link ideas in longer sentences, but sentence structures are often faulty, and errors can make relationships between events unclear. For example, “The line graph illustrate” has incorrect subject–verb agreement, while “the nickel was high in the graph at the month of January” has problems with articles and sentence construction. Tense and clause formation are also inconsistent in phrases such as “the prices were decrease” and “the prices were slightly increase.” Punctuation and capitalisation are unreliable, with several sentences joined together or beginning with lowercase letters. Practise accurate simple past forms for the 2014 data, then combine them with controlled clauses using “while,” “whereas,” and “after.”

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