Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph gives infoemation about the average change each month in the prices of copper, nickel and zinc during 2014.

Overall, all the prices of metals experienced some fluctuations trend over the period .

In januray , the prices in nickel made up about 6% ,While cooper and zinc compromised around 2% and 1% respectively . after 3 months Nickel showed a drop down to around 1% and remained stable, then countinued to decrease reaching a low point with -3% in juin ,the metal increased to around -1% and stayed at the same level until the ninth month , nickel showed a fluctuation in october , then went up and stabilaise at 1% from the total price . The zinc experienced a climb to about 3% after the first month , then went down to about -1% in juin , in juily it slightly climbed approximitly about -0.5 percent , after stablising for 3 months it went up reaching its highest point at 2% .

simirarly , the prices of copper had the same path as zinc but with different percentages .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the three metals and give a broad overview that their prices changed during the year. Several key figures are also reported accurately, including nickel’s high of about 6% in January and low of -3% in June, and zinc’s rise to around 3% in February. However, the overview is too general to highlight the main contrasts, and the account of copper is reduced to saying it followed zinc’s path, which misses its comparatively modest movements and its year-end rise. Some details are unclear or inaccurate: nickel did not fluctuate in October, but fell to about -2%, and its recovery to 1% began in November. Select the most important highs, lows and shared patterns, and report them precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic overall structure: an introduction, a general overview and descriptions of the metals. This gives the reader a starting point, and time markers such as “in January,” “after 3 months” and “in October” help establish sequence. However, most of the detail is packed into one long paragraph, so the progression is difficult to follow. The nickel account moves through many months in a single sentence, while the final comparison about copper is too brief to complete the discussion. Linking words such as “then” and “after” are repeated, and some transitions do not clearly show how the figures relate. Use separate, logically grouped paragraphs and clearer comparisons between the metals.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing trends, including “drop,” “reaching a low point,” “climbed” and “stayed at the same level.” These choices show an attempt to vary the language rather than simply list figures. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning harder to follow. For example, “prices in nickel made up” and “copper and zinc compromised” are not natural ways to describe percentage changes; “the price of nickel rose” and “copper and zinc recorded” would be clearer. There are also noticeable spelling errors, such as “januray,” “countinued” and “stablising.” Build a reliable set of trend verbs and check spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example by using “after” and “then” to describe changes over time. However, sentence structures are limited, and the long sentence describing nickel contains several clauses joined without clear punctuation, making the sequence difficult to process. There are recurring errors in sentence boundaries, capitalization and punctuation, as in “While cooper…” and “after 3 months Nickel…”. Some grammatical patterns are also incomplete or awkward, including “after stablising for 3 months it went up,” where the subject of “it” is not clearly identified. Use shorter, controlled sentences alongside a few accurate complex forms, and check capitalization and punctuation when moving between clauses.

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