Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

We see X-Axis he show the month Jaunary,Fabruary and Novembar to december and same we see a Y-Axis he reparsent parsentage change in price compared with previous month.

Firest one is Copper his price in jaunary 2%, after time we see his price in few month decrease almost -0.5% but after time his price increase in July or october price seme.and the last month in 2014 his price increase almost 1.5%.

Second one is we see Nickal his price in jaunary is very high 6% but after a long time we see Nickal price in Jun his price decrease -3%. after time we see his price increase December 1%.

Third on is Zinc his price in Jaunary 1%, the next month his price increase 3%.And the after few month his prices same -0.5%, but the lost month his price increase 2%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify all three metals and report several relevant figures, including nickel’s January peak of 6% and June low of about -3%, as well as copper’s final rise to around 1.5%. However, the response has no clear overview of the main pattern, such as the metals’ general decline around mid-year and recovery toward the end. Some details are inaccurate or unclear: copper is described as increasing from July to October, although it is broadly stable before dipping in October, and zinc’s values are not consistently summarised. The response also contains only 141 words, below the required 150, which limits the development of the summary. Add a concise overview and compare the metals’ key highs, lows and later recovery.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic, understandable sequence: it introduces the graph and then discusses copper, nickel and zinc in turn. This metal-by-metal organisation helps the reader follow the subject, and phrases such as “after time” and “the last month” attempt to show sequence. However, progression is weakened by repeated, vague transitions and unclear references, for example “after a long time” and “his price.” There is also no distinct overview paragraph to establish the main trends before the details. Use clear paragraphing, organise the report into an overview and selected comparisons, and choose precise links such as “by June,” “whereas,” and “in the final two months” to make relationships between figures explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of relevant terms, including “average monthly change,” “percentage change,” “decrease,” and “increase,” so the reader can generally identify the topic and direction of movement. However, vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with “price” and “after time” used repeatedly rather than more precise language for describing a graph. Numerous spelling errors—such as “Jaunary,” “Fabruary,” “Nickal,” and “parsentage”—also make the report less clear and weaken control of written vocabulary. Some expressions are awkward, including “his price” for a metal’s price and “price same” for a stable figure. Practise accurate spelling and use a broader range of chart language, such as “fluctuated,” “remained stable,” “fell to,” and “recovered.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most sentences follow a simple subject-and-verb pattern, and the reader can often understand the intended sequence. However, grammatical control is weak and errors are frequent, sometimes making relationships between ideas difficult to interpret. For example, “We see X-Axis he show” has an unclear subject and verb structure, while “after a long time we see Nickal price in Jun his price decrease” combines clauses without a clear grammatical connection. Articles, possessives, and sentence boundaries are also inconsistently handled. Try building accurate simple sentences first—for example, “Nickel fell to -3% in June”—then add controlled comparisons using “while” or “whereas.” Check verb forms, articles, and punctuation when editing.

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