Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The grap below illutrate the average change in the prices of metals such as copper,nickle and zinc during 2014. in start price of nickel is high but with pass of time its go to decline, and touch the bottom line . then it bounce back but in short increase. now if we talk about other metals their prices are not too high but they start with average and then show little decline in thier prices. But after they maintain their price values in the market. After some time their price are move toward up but its just minor increase.

In conclusion the price of nickel metal are so high but it demerge eventually, and then it maintain its price. On the other hand the price of zinc and copper in start is average but they didn't lose their value as nickel so they maintain thier prices in the market.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the three metals and convey the broad contrast between nickel’s sharper movement and the smaller changes in copper and zinc. However, the response only partially reports the graph’s main features: it gives no clear month-by-month comparisons and misses important details, such as nickel’s steep fall to around −3% in June and the metals’ recovery toward the end of the year. The claim that nickel “touch[es] the bottom line” is inaccurate, since its lowest point is above the graph’s minimum. The overview is also vague, and the conclusion repeats earlier points rather than adding a precise summary. The response is one word below the required minimum. Select the key peaks, troughs and shared trends, and support the overview with accurate figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable sequence: an introduction, a description of the trends, and a concluding paragraph. Connectors such as “In conclusion” and “On the other hand” help signal relationships between ideas. However, the progression is not consistently clear because the description moves between nickel and the other metals without organising the information by period or making direct comparisons. Phrases such as “after some time” and “then” are vague, and the conclusion largely repeats the earlier description. Grouping the data into clear stages—for example, the first half of the year and the later recovery—and using specific time references would make the organisation more coherent and the links between points more effective.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “decline,” “increase,” “prices” and “maintain,” so the general topic is understandable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning unclear. For example, “demerge” does not express the intended fall in price, and “touch the bottom line” is not a precise way to describe a low point. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “grap,” “illutrate,” “nickle” and “thier.” Use accurate terms for trends and vary them appropriately, such as “fell,” “reached a low,” “recovered” and “remained stable.” Proofreading spelling would also improve clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to link ideas in longer sentences, for example with “but,” “then” and “after,” and the reader can generally follow the intended comparison. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence boundaries make the writing difficult to read smoothly. Examples include “its go to decline,” “their price are move toward up” and “the price of nickel metal are so high.” Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “2014. in start.” Aim for complete sentences with a clear subject and correctly formed verb, such as “Nickel’s price started high but then declined.” Check singular and plural agreement and use full stops to separate ideas.

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