Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the average monthly change prices of Copper, Nickel,and Zinc during 2014
Overall,the prices changed of three metals,we started in January, the highest percentage we had Nickel with6%,for the second Copper made up 2%, while the lowest percentage Zinc by 1%
In detail of the highest percentage in January Nickel between January and March the percentage fell rapidly from6% to 1% and remained stable between March and April after that dropped to the lowest percentage -3% in jaune and in july increased slightly to -1% after that remanied stable between July and September , between septembre rose gradually to 1%, whereas Copper the percentage was fluctuated through the period, and decreased to the lowest percentage around -1% between January and May , after that yhe percentage was increased slightly to 1% and Zin firstly rose the peak percentage 3% after that fall rapidly to -1% after that increased to 2%
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
You identify the main starting point accurately: nickel is highest in January at about 6%, followed by copper at 2% and zinc at 1%. You also report several broad movements, including nickel’s sharp fall and zinc’s rise towards the end of the year. However, the task is only partly covered because there is no clear overview of the metals’ overall pattern, and some details are inaccurate or incomplete. For example, copper’s lowest point is around -0.5%, not -1%, and it returns to positive territory in July; nickel rises to 1% in November, rather than between September and October. Include a concise overview and compare the metals’ mid-year declines and late-year recovery more precisely.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has a basic sequence, moving from an opening statement and January figures to more detailed trends. This gives the reader some sense of how the year develops. However, there is no clear overall progression: the overview is mixed with individual data, and the final sentence shifts abruptly between copper and zinc. Long strings of information joined by “after that” and “between” make relationships difficult to follow, while punctuation and spacing further obscure the sequence. Organise the report into a clear introduction, an overview, and one or two detail paragraphs grouped by trend or metal. Use a wider range of accurate linking expressions and separate each main comparison into a sentence.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “fell rapidly,” “remained stable,” and “increased slightly,” so the reader can recognise the intended trends. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning unclear. For instance, “the prices changed of three metals” is not a natural way to describe monthly percentage changes, and “the highest percentage we had Nickel” is awkward. There are also spelling errors such as “jaune,” “remanied,” and “yhe.” Aim for precise terms such as “monthly price change,” “reached a low,” and “recovered,” and check spelling carefully before submitting.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt to describe changes over time using past-tense verbs and some longer sentence structures, but control is inconsistent. Several sentences contain faulty patterns, such as “the prices changed of three metals” and “the percentage was fluctuated,” and the long sentence beginning “In detail of the highest percentage” combines many clauses without clear grammatical boundaries. Missing spaces and punctuation, as in “Nickel,and” and “with6%,” also make the writing harder to read. Use shorter, complete sentences and check subject–verb patterns and tense forms. For example, write “Nickel fell from 6% to 1% between January and March” rather than building several trends into one sentence.
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