Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The grapgh shows the average changers in the metala price in the year 2014 or also it has covered three metals type : first one is "Copper" seconfd one is "Nickel" and third one is "Zinc". We discuss in this how all three metals prices changes in every month of 2014.

In the month of Febrary it shows that Nickel is very high price also it has only metal that lower price was also very low in the month of June. Or in the December Nickel stopped in 1% in the end of year 2014 where in the beginning of the year it has started at 6%. Whereas Copper started at 2% and Zinc started at 1% . or it was ended at 2% also.also in the month of July ,Augast and September Copper stuck on the 1% price compare to others or in other way Nickel also stuck in this months at -1% or Nikcel also stuck in the month of March an April in the price of metals at 1%.

In the end, we show that Nickel price was hire than two other metals.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the three metals and include several relevant comparisons, such as nickel beginning at 6% and ending at 1%, copper starting at 2%, and copper remaining around 1% from July to September. However, the response only minimally summarises the graph: it gives no clear overview of the main pattern across the year, and the closing claim that nickel was higher than the other metals is too broad because nickel fell below them for much of the second half. Some details are inaccurate or unclear, including saying zinc ended at 2% when the chart shows about 2% but not clearly distinguishing this from copper’s ending value of about 1.5%. Select the major rises, falls and year-end recovery, and compare them accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic sequence, moving from an introduction to selected monthly details and then a brief conclusion. This gives the reader some sense of the topic, and comparisons such as nickel’s start and finish are relevant. However, the information is not arranged into a clear overview followed by logically grouped details. The long second paragraph combines unrelated points, and connectors such as “Or,” “Whereas,” and repeated “also” do not reliably show how the ideas relate. The final sentence repeats a general comparison rather than summarising the overall trends. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and key details, and group the metals’ early-year movements and later changes so the progression is easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “average,” “price,” “started,” “ended,” and “stuck,” and the metal names make the subject clear. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with several inaccurate or awkward choices that strain understanding. For example, “average changers in the metala price” and “three metals type” do not express the graph’s subject naturally, while “stuck on the 1% price” is an imprecise way to describe a stable monthly change. Spelling errors such as “grapgh,” “Febrary,” “Augast,” and “Nikcel” also reduce clarity. Build a small set of accurate trend terms—such as “fluctuated,” “declined,” “recovered,” and “remained stable”—and use them with “monthly percentage change.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas with clauses using “whereas” and “that,” but sentence structures are very limited and frequent errors sometimes make relationships difficult to follow. For example, “We discuss in this how all three metals prices changes” has problems with word order, possessive form and subject–verb agreement. In “Nickel is very high price,” the sentence lacks a suitable verb construction, while “it was ended at 2%” uses an incorrect passive form. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with run-on sentences and fragments such as “or it was ended at 2% also.also.” Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine related comparisons using correctly formed clauses and consistent past-tense reporting.

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