Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph below illustrates the average montly ups and downs in the price of three metals during 2014.
Three metals are zinc,copper and nickel .
At the very begnning of the year 2014 , in jaunary the price of nickel was on top and the zinc is at lost price in that month . But with the passage of time , at the end of year 2014 the price of zinc was on top and the nickel had the loest price . These three metals passes through numbers of ups and down during the year 2014 .
The major things those are noticeable are , the price of Copper does not faced much ups and downs it just went just little down in may and again it cames started coming to it's orginal price in june .It end up with the same price as it had in its start .
In case of nickel which showed huge downfall in its price form the starting and maintained its price at march . After maintaining its price it again faced some much decrease in it's price in july with that decrease it start riseing it's price and end up at 1 percent .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
You identify the three metals and make relevant comparisons between January and December, noting nickel’s high starting point and zinc’s stronger finish. You also recognise that copper fluctuated less than the other metals. However, the response only partially summarises the graph: zinc’s pattern is not described beyond the year-end comparison, and there is no clear overall overview of the metals’ shared mid-year decline and recovery. Some details are inaccurate or unclear: copper does not return to its January level by December, and its small fall occurs in May and June, not just May. Nickel’s sharpest fall is in June, rather than July. Select the main trends accurately and support them with a few key figures.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a basic paragraph structure, moving from an introduction to comparisons and then separate comments on copper and nickel. This gives the reader some organisation, and phrases such as “with the passage of time” signal a change in period. However, the progression is incomplete: zinc receives only a brief mention, and the final paragraph ends without a concluding overview. Linking is sometimes repetitive or awkward, particularly the repeated use of “after” and “with that decrease.” Some references, such as “it” in the nickel paragraph, are not always immediately clear. Group the metals’ shared trends together, use clearer transitions between periods, and ensure each paragraph develops one complete point.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some relevant language for describing movement, including “downfall,” “decrease,” “rise,” and “ups and downs,” so the general subject is understandable. However, the range is limited and several expressions are informal or imprecise for an academic graph summary. “On top” and “at lost price” do not clearly express highest and lowest values, while “numbers of ups and down” is an awkward collocation. Spelling errors such as “montly,” “begnning,” and “loest” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise set of trend terms and use them consistently, for example, “rose,” “fell,” “fluctuated,” “reached a low,” and “recovered.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a contrast between the metals at the beginning and end of the year. However, errors are frequent, and some sentences are difficult to follow. Examples include “the zinc is at lost price,” “These three metals passes,” and “the price of Copper does not faced,” where tense, agreement, and sentence construction are faulty. The sentence beginning “In case of nickel” is also a fragment, and the sequence “it start riseing it's price” has incorrect verb forms and punctuation. Use past tense consistently for the 2014 data, check subject–verb agreement, and make sure each sentence has a complete main clause. Shorter, accurate sentences would help clarify the comparisons.
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