Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 5.5)

In graph the prices of metal change monthly in the year 2014.are the three metals is [copper, nickel and zinc].now we comparisons where relevant .

As,we see in graph the price of copper mostly change little bit in whole year except one or two months is may or june. after june the rate of copper again grow at the price 1 and stay .The most changable metal from these three is nickel which price is go down from 6 to -3 in june . after three months the price remain same and from october again grow and stay on 1 . now the last matel the name Zinc . The price start from 1 in january and grow in one month upto 3 as the graph show the price of Zinc after faburary go down utpo -1 in the month june and nearby three months the price of Zinc remain same and after octuber grow again and end at 2.

Now the price go down more of nickel which may go more in loss from other two and overall the prices of three metals namely copper,nickel,Zinc. go downward in year .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify all three metals and report several relevant movements, including nickel’s sharp fall from about 6% to −3% in June and zinc’s rise to around 3% in February. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: the claim that all three prices “go downward in year” overlooks their recovery towards December, when copper, nickel and zinc all show positive monthly changes. Some details are also imprecise, such as saying nickel remains unchanged for three months after June, when it rises from about −3% to −1% and then stays near that level. A clearer overview of the metals’ contrasting fluctuations and year-end recovery, supported by more accurate comparisons, would make the summary more complete and relevant to the main features shown.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic sequence: it introduces the chart, discusses copper, nickel and zinc in turn, and ends with a general comment. This gives the reader some organisation, but progression is weakened by the lack of clear paragraphing and by abrupt transitions such as “now we comparisons” and “now the last matel.” Several ideas are joined into long sentences, making it difficult to distinguish one trend from another. The final statement also repeats the idea of decline rather than drawing together the key comparisons. Use a short introduction and overview, followed by logically grouped details, and connect sentences with clear references such as “By contrast” or “In the final two months.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “price,” “grow,” “remain same” and “go down,” so the general trends can be understood. However, the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or awkward, including “mostly change little bit,” “most changable,” and “go more in loss.” Spelling errors such as “faburary,” “octuber” and “matel” also reduce clarity and control. Aim for precise language for movement and comparison, and vary repeated basic verbs. For example, describe a figure as “falling,” “recovering” or “remaining stable,” and use “fluctuated” where a series changes direction. Check spelling and choose natural collocations when describing percentage changes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to describe several trends in connected sentences, but sentence structures are mostly simple or joined with “and,” and attempts at longer constructions are often faulty. For example, “In graph the prices of metal change monthly in the year 2014.are the three metals is” has problems with articles, agreement and sentence boundaries. In “the price of copper mostly change,” the subject and verb do not agree, while “the price remain same” lacks both correct agreement and an article. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, with sentences beginning in lower case and full stops placed incorrectly. Practise accurate simple past forms and subject–verb agreement, then build longer sentences using controlled clauses such as “Although nickel fell sharply, it recovered by November.”

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