Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line garph illustrates the average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc during 2014.

Overall; The line of zinc it was increased in trangular shape in starting but later it was constantly increased and crossed the nickel. While the copper and nick was decreased instantly but at the end the it will was on same percentage.

Looking at the percentage that change in price compared with the previous month on zinc was it was on 1 petcentage on janauray it increased up to 3% on 1 month but it was constantly downfall from Febuary to june and again it was grow up a little but on october it was again decreased and become -1% and it highely riseup an gain 2% at the end of month december.

In terms of copper and zinc it wsstrted from 6% to 2% and it was constantly decreased but in may the copper was curved and increased 1% and the nickel was made a shape of trangle and become -3% but at the end of period they both was on same percentage that was one.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the three metals and give an overview, but the main trends are not reported accurately enough, which limits how fully the task is addressed. For example, you say zinc “was constantly increased” and later “crossed the nickel,” although zinc generally fell from February to June, then recovered, and the graph does not show a clear crossing as described. You also confuse the metals in “In terms of copper and zinc”: the figures from 6% to 2% belong to nickel, not copper and zinc. Some useful details are included, such as zinc reaching about 3% in February and nickel falling to around -3% in June. Make the overview precise, then compare each series using correctly matched figures and trends.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation: an introduction is followed by an overview and two detail paragraphs, and phrases such as “Overall” and “Looking at” signal a shift in focus. However, progression is difficult to follow because the overview combines unclear claims, and the final paragraph switches between copper, zinc and nickel without a consistent comparison. The repeated use of “and” also makes several long sequences hard to separate, while “In terms of copper and zinc” does not match the nickel figures that follow. Use one paragraph for the overview and organise the details by metal or by shared trends. Clearer sentence boundaries and more accurate linking would help readers follow the comparisons.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “average monthly change,” “percentage,” “increased” and “decreased,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms make the description unclear: “in trangular shape,” “constantly downfall,” “curved,” and “made a shape of trangle” are not natural ways to describe line-graph trends. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “garph,” “janauray” and “highely.” Choose standard trend language and use it consistently—for example, “rose,” “fell,” “fluctuated,” “recovered” and “reached a low.” Check spelling and use “percentage change” or “rate” where appropriate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts longer sentences and uses some time references, but the range of sentence structures is limited and errors are frequent enough to make several relationships difficult to understand. Examples include “The line of zinc it was increased,” “the copper and nick was decreased,” and “they both was on same percentage.” These show problems with sentence construction, verb forms and subject–verb agreement. Articles and tense choices are also unreliable, as in “at the end the it will was.” Aim first for accurate simple sentences with a clear subject and verb, such as “Zinc rose in February” or “Nickel fell to -3% in June.” Then combine ideas using controlled clauses, and check agreement, articles and punctuation.

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