Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-13
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrate the comparison of copper,nickle and zinc price rate during the month of 2014.
Overall,It is noticeable that the Copper price rate was very high in the begining of january 2014 and how imidiatly decreased its rate at the end of the year.whearas we can see the price rate of Zinc started with very low percentage in january and consistantly it increased in december.
In general,Metals prices fluctuate during the year in 2014 in which Copper fluctuation started with the rate of 6 that was huge at begining as compared to other Nickel and Zinc rate.Since its slightly drop in June and reached from 6 to rate of 2 only.
On the other hand,when we look at the Nickel and Zinc in January 2014 they remained consistant whole of the years months.Thier starting point rate was in previous month reached 1 and in next month they reached 2 that was remained considerably one time higher than Copper in December.
In conclusion,we can say minors changes were taken place in Zinc and Nickel prices.however Copper dropped alot in the middle of the year.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response attempts an overview and mentions changes across the year, but it misidentifies several central features, so the graph is only minimally reported. Copper did not begin at 6%; it started at about 2%, and it did not fall sharply at year-end: it rose to around 1.5% in December. The claim that nickel and zinc remained consistent throughout is also inaccurate, especially for nickel, which fell from about 6% in January to a low of roughly -3% in June. Some comparisons are present, but the figures and trends are often confused, and the overview does not accurately summarise the main patterns. Focus on the largest movements and give a few correctly matched values for each metal.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has a basic paragraph structure, with an opening, overview-like statements, further discussion and a conclusion. Connectors such as “Overall,” “On the other hand” and “In conclusion” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the same metals and trends are revisited without a clear sequence, and some references are unclear—for example, “Since its slightly drop in June” does not make clear which metal or movement is meant. The final paragraph also repeats earlier claims rather than drawing together the main comparisons. Organise the body chronologically or by metal, and use each paragraph to report distinct, accurate information.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary is sufficient to identify the topic and describe basic movement, with terms such as “fluctuate,” “increased,” “decreased” and “percentage.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the intended meaning hard to interpret. For example, “price rate” is repeated where “price change” or “percentage change” would be more natural, and “Copper fluctuation started with the rate of 6” is an unclear way to report a figure. Spelling errors such as “nickle,” “begining” and “consistant” are also noticeable. Build a more precise set of trend phrases and check spelling and word forms before submitting.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
There are attempts to use longer sentences and linking clauses, but complex structures are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some statements difficult to understand. For example, “Overall, It is noticeable that the Copper price rate was very high … and how imidiatly decreased its rate” has an incomplete, awkwardly joined structure. Subject–verb agreement is also inconsistent in “The line graph illustrate,” while tense and sentence construction are problematic in “Since its slightly drop in June.” Punctuation and spacing around commas and full stops are inconsistent, and sentence openings are sometimes joined without a clear grammatical relationship. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses while checking agreement and verb forms.
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