Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph compare the change of three metal copper,nickel and zinc prices in 2014.

Overall,the graph illustrate the rate of metal changes every month.The rate of change in all three metal is flucating,some has high and some has low in the graph.

At the first,the drastic change happened was Nickel whereas,copper remain same not too much high and not too much low.The change in the metal Nickel was 6% at tye begining and fell down to -3% at the month of February.Zinc metal has also the same graph as Copper where two metal has flictutating line graph in the presented table.

At the last,the three metal fell down to the - point but Nickel slope down too much and copper and zinc remain constant not too much change just upwards and downward.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the three metals and attempt an overview, but the response reports the graph only minimally and several key details are inaccurate. Nickel begins at about 6%, but it falls to around 1% in March and reaches its low of about -3% in June—not February as stated. The claim that all three metals “fell down to the - point” is also misleading: copper remains positive for most of the year, while nickel and zinc recover to positive changes in November and December. The overview does not clearly compare the metals’ overall patterns or identify the main extremes. The response is also 17 words below the required minimum. To improve, select accurate starting points, lows and end-of-year movements, then summarise the main contrasts clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, an overview and two paragraphs describing details. This gives the reader some sense of organisation, and phrases such as “Overall” and “At the last” signal stages of the response. However, there is no clear progression through the months, and the final paragraph repeats the general idea of fluctuation rather than adding a precise comparison. Linking words are sometimes awkward or unclear, as in “At the first, the drastic change happened was Nickel whereas,” which makes the relationship between the ideas difficult to follow. Organise the body chronologically or by comparing the metals’ patterns, and use clear links such as “By contrast” and “In the final two months” to guide the reader.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing a graph, including “rate of change,” “fell down,” “slope” and “fluctuating.” This shows an attempt to discuss movement rather than simply list the metals. However, the range is limited and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the meaning unclear. For example, “the same graph as Copper” does not explain how zinc compares, and “remain constant” conflicts with the changes you describe. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “flucating,” “flictutating” and “begining.” Build a more precise set of trend expressions, such as “declined,” “recovered,” “remained relatively stable” and “reached a low,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a comparison with “whereas” and a sentence beginning “Overall.” However, complex constructions are often faulty, and frequent errors affect clarity. For example, “The line graph compare” needs subject–verb agreement, while “all three metal is” has both agreement and plural errors. The sentence “The change in the metal Nickel was 6% at tye begining and fell down to -3% at the month of February” has an unclear subject for “fell” and an incorrect preposition pattern. Commas are also often attached to words without a following space. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using controlled clauses and check agreement, articles, plurals and punctuation.

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