Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line graph illustrate the average monthly variation in the charges of copper, nickel, and zinic during 2014.

Overall, prices of all three metals is decline, Merly zinic showed the small increase in cost. On the other hand the significant decreased in nickel worth.Copper price was almost shame in whole year.

Nickel had the higest price in the start of year 6 which demonstrate the

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the graph’s subject and attempt an overview, noting that nickel had the highest starting figure and that copper changed little. However, the overview is inaccurate: all three metals did not decline overall across the year, and zinc did not show only a small increase; its monthly change rose to about 2% in December. The response also stops before explaining the main movements, such as nickel’s sharp fall to around -3% in June and the metals’ recovery towards year-end. The unfinished sentence, “which demonstrate the”, leaves a key comparison incomplete. The response is substantially below the required 150 words, so it cannot provide the necessary summary and supporting details. Develop a complete overview and report several accurate comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by an overview, and “On the other hand” signals a contrast. These features give the reader some indication of how the information is being presented. However, the progression is very limited because the response ends after an incomplete sentence about nickel and contains no developed account of the months or comparisons. The overview itself also places contrasting claims together without clearly explaining their relationship. Use separate paragraphs for the introduction, overview and key details, then group the metals’ movements logically. Complete each sentence and use linking expressions only where they clarify a genuine contrast or sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing a graph, including “monthly variation,” “increase,” “decreased,” and “highest price.” This shows an attempt to use task-related language rather than relying only on general terms. However, several word choices or spellings make the meaning less clear: “zinic,” “Merly,” “charges,” and “worth” are not appropriate or accurate in this context. “Almost shame” also appears to be an unsuccessful attempt to describe stability. The range is limited, and the same general ideas are expressed without precise language for rises, falls or fluctuations. Aim for accurate collocations such as “percentage change in price,” “fell sharply,” and “remained relatively stable,” checking spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response includes simple statements and an attempt at a more complex sentence, such as “On the other hand the significant decreased in nickel worth.” However, grammatical control is inconsistent and the range is narrow. In “The line graph illustrate,” the singular subject requires a singular verb; “prices of all three metals is decline” has problems with agreement and verb form. The phrase “Nickel had the higest price in the start of year 6 which demonstrate the” is incomplete, so the relationship between the ideas cannot be understood. Punctuation is also missing after the introductory contrast. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then build longer comparisons with correct verb forms and complete clauses.

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