Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-07-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The provided line chat depicts tha comparions between ststisical data off changes rang of various typs of metals in 2014.
In 2014,Nickel was on top off price as acoumpair to Zinc with 6%,But on march,Nickel was singificant change and plummed with 1% and Zicc incresed with 3%.Copper was started with 2% and mainor changed.
In jun,copper,nickel and zinc were went to same way with repidly decresed.Nickel was number with -3% as well as Zinc also with -1%.Copper has a majour differents as compar to zinc with -1.5 establish.
In octumbur,Nickel was rise with -1%.zinc and copper were samll boots with -1.7% and 1% resectavely.copper,nickel and zinc were followed same stret line and has no changed.
In december,Zinc was a drameticaly chnaged with 1.5% in added with nickel with 1%.Copper was lightly changed with grow up 1.5%
Overall,It is evidence that tha until jun,This has a drasticaly chnage with reduced price in prevoius month,Moreover,still december,This has a most off changed with get batter up.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response attempts to summarize the graph, but it fails to accurately report the data. There are significant factual errors, such as misinterpreting the negative values on the graph as 'rises' or 'boots'. The overview is vague and does not clearly highlight the main trends or significant differences between the metals. While the response covers the three metals, the information is often confusing or contradictory, making it difficult for the reader to understand the actual trends shown in the graph. To improve, focus on accurately reading the axes and identifying clear peaks, troughs, and overall trends rather than listing every minor fluctuation.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as 'Moreover, still december' or 'In jun, copper, nickel and zinc were went to same way'. Referencing is frequently unclear, and the transition between ideas is disjointed. While there is an attempt at an overall structure, the lack of clear logical flow and the frequent misuse of linking words hinder the clarity of the report. Improving the use of cohesive devices and ensuring each paragraph has a clear focus would significantly enhance the coherence of the writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and contains numerous spelling errors, such as 'ststisical', 'acoumpair', 'plummed', 'majour', 'octumbur', and 'drameticaly'. These errors, combined with incorrect word choices like 'boots' instead of 'boosts' or 'stret line', make the text difficult to follow. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with precision. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning the correct spelling of common academic terms and practicing the use of precise vocabulary for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'declined', or 'remained stable'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('Nickel was number'), incorrect verb tenses ('were went to'), and sentence structure. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with many missing spaces after commas and periods. The range of structures is limited, and attempts at complex sentences are generally unsuccessful. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct subject-verb agreement, and proofreading for common errors in tense and word order. Consistent practice with simple, error-free sentences is a better foundation than attempting complex structures that are currently inaccurate.
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