Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The provided line graph demonstrates the information about monthly changes in the prices of copper, zinc and nickel during 2014.
Overall, it can be seen that the prices of all listed metals exhibited fluctuations during 2014, with copper prices decreasing rapidly.
Notably, the prices was around 1% for zinc at starting, which increased after a month and fell to around -1, followed by a gradual rise for 4 months and it surpassed the prices of copper and nickel. Furthermore, the price change was around 2%, which dived till June and reached at approximately -1%, before increasing and stabilizing at 1%.
Moving ahead, the price of copper was 6% at start of the year, which went down to 1 by March, and showed minimal decrease till May, before diving to -3 in June, it showed minor fluctuations till July and remained stable at -1 for 3 months, and showed minor changes till the end of year and reached at -1.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the graph, but the analysis is somewhat inconsistent. While you identify the general trends, the description of the data points is occasionally imprecise or confusing, such as the description of zinc's movement. You successfully highlight the key fluctuations for all three metals, but the comparison between them could be more explicit. To improve, ensure that the data points cited are clearly linked to the specific months and that the overall trends are summarized with greater clarity. The report provides a sufficient overview, but some of the specific data reporting lacks the precision required for a higher band score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. You use some cohesive devices like 'Notably', 'Furthermore', and 'Moving ahead' to transition between sections. However, the internal cohesion within paragraphs is sometimes mechanical. For instance, the long sentence describing copper's movement is a run-on that makes the logical flow difficult to follow. Improving the use of linking words and breaking down complex, multi-clause sentences would enhance the overall coherence and make the information easier to digest.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'fluctuations', 'gradual rise', and 'stabilizing'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'at starting' (should be 'at the start') and 'dived till June' (which is slightly informal). The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the main points, but it lacks the precision and sophistication required for higher bands. To improve, focus on using more precise reporting verbs and nouns related to data trends, and ensure that your prepositions are used correctly in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are several grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading. For example, 'the prices was' is a subject-verb agreement error, and 'reached at approximately' is an incorrect prepositional phrase. Additionally, some sentences are overly long and lack proper punctuation, leading to run-on structures. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that complex sentences are punctuated correctly.
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