Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The line graph depicts the average monthly change in the prices of three metals durin 2014

It is clearly seen that the copper change in the prices with pa monthey was almost incrase . However, Nickle average monthly price was decrase in 2014.

To commence with, copper change in prices monthle was 2% . After that, it slight decrase was 0.5% to M . which remained same to A letter. Then, thae was dept mildly decrase was -0.5 in 2014 to then it remained same to J. After that, it sgincreased significant was 1% with privous month it remained constant to S. After that, it flacuate increase till out thought out the peiod. However, Nickel change in price with previous month started 6%.

After that, it decreased gradually was 1% to M. It remained same to A letter. Then slight decrease 0.5% and it sharp decrease was -3% to J letter with month, after that, it significant increase was -1% to J. Then remained constant was to S letter. Which slight decrease was -2%, then sharply increase was 1%. It remained constant till over given the period.

Moving towards remaining information, Zinc change in prices in 2014 with previous month was 1%. After that, it sharp increased was 3%, then, there was gradually decreased it 1%, which sharp significant decrease was -1%. After that, it fluctuate to O letter. Then sharp increase was 0.5%, it sign slight increase till over given the year.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to describe the trends in the graph, but it fails to provide a clear overview or effectively highlight the main features. The description of the data is often confusing and inaccurate, such as stating 'it slight decrase was 0.5% to M' or 'it sgincreased significant was 1%'. The report lacks a logical summary of the trends, and the data points mentioned are often difficult to follow or interpret correctly. The response does not adequately compare the three metals, which is a key requirement of the task. The lack of clarity in reporting the figures significantly hinders the reader's ability to understand the information presented in the graph.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed and confusing. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often misused or placed awkwardly, such as 'To commence with' and 'Moving towards remaining information'. The referencing is frequently unclear, with phrases like 'to M', 'to A letter', and 'to J' being used without context, making it difficult to follow the sequence of events. The lack of logical flow between sentences and the repetitive nature of the phrasing make the text difficult to read and understand.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The range of vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'it slight decrase was 0.5%' and 'it sgincreased significant was 1%'. Spelling errors are also prevalent throughout the text, including 'durin', 'incrase', 'decrase', 'sgincreased', 'flacuate', and 'peiod'. The vocabulary used is not sufficient to describe the trends in the graph with any degree of precision or accuracy. The student struggles to use appropriate terminology for describing data trends, which limits the effectiveness of the communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical structure is highly problematic, with frequent errors that impede communication. There is a lack of control over basic sentence structures, and the use of complex sentences is almost entirely absent or incorrectly formed. Examples include 'it is clearly seen that the copper change in the prices with pa monthey was almost incrase' and 'which slight decrease was -2%, then sharply increase was 1%'. Subject-verb agreement, tense usage, and word order are consistently incorrect. The high frequency of grammatical errors makes the text very difficult to follow and significantly impacts the overall quality of the writing.

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