Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The graph illustrate monthly averge changes in prices during 2014 of metals.
which are copper,nickel and zinc.
In the graph the doted line represent the copper metal,black line shows nickel and thin line with cross shows zinc progress.Y axs alaborate the changes in price compared with thwe previous months and the other hand X axs represents the months.where as Nickel started from 60% to graduly coming done to 40% in month february then 10% in march and contuinue til april and salit down to May and so in december littler grows.
other hand Zinc price strated from 10%to 30% in a month then suddenly gone down straght to negitive in month of june to october the prices of zinc gone higher from month october to december which means in the end of the year zinc collect better average.
copper %changes shows ups and down same as others metals it started from 20% of his price and countinue to the month june and from that prices gose up to month september and in the end of the year collection is average.
if we campare all three of them their average is same .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to describe the trends, but it fails to provide a clear overview or highlight the most significant features. The description of the data is often inaccurate; for example, the student claims nickel started at 60%, which is not supported by the graph. Furthermore, the analysis is fragmented and lacks a logical summary of the main trends. The attempt to compare the metals is weak, as the conclusion that their averages are the same is not clearly derived from the data provided. To improve, focus on identifying the starting and ending points, the most significant fluctuations, and the overall trajectory of each metal.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks a clear structure. There is no paragraphing, and the sentences are linked in a very mechanical and often confusing way. The use of cohesive devices is minimal and frequently misused, such as 'where as' and 'other hand', which do not effectively connect ideas. The progression of information is difficult to follow because the description jumps between metals without a clear logical flow. To improve, you should organize your report into distinct paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on specific trends and comparisons.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'averge', 'doted', 'axs', 'alaborate', 'thwe', 'graduly', 'contuinue', 'salit', 'straght', 'negitive', and 'campare'. These errors, combined with the misuse of words like 'collect' and 'collection' to describe price trends, make the text difficult to read. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends accurately (e.g., using 'littler grows' instead of 'a slight increase'). You need to learn and correctly use specific vocabulary for describing graphs, such as 'fluctuate', 'decline', 'peak', and 'plateau'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The graph illustrate', 'line represent'), incorrect verb tenses, and missing articles. Sentence structure is often fragmented or run-on, making it hard to identify the intended meaning. Punctuation is also problematic, with many missing spaces after periods and commas. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and practice proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb forms.
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