Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The given bar chart elucited information about average monthly change in prices of copper nickel and zinc 2014 The chart different among categories and present the data in number or percentage . Over its is clear that there are noticeable differences among categories shown in the chart. Nickel appear to the highest Zinc to the lowest Copper appear to the second highest . in adittion some categories show some flucation by following increment as well as decrement where's some number of remain stable . According to the chart the first activities the value 2% to 1.5% compared to the other . The followed by second activities Nickel the number of value 1% to 6% compared to the other . the third activities zinc the value 2% to 1% compared to the other .This show the clear comparisgen to the other categories

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you attempt to identify the main features, the description of the data is unclear and lacks precision. You mention '2% to 1.5%' and '1% to 6%', but these figures do not clearly correspond to the trends shown in the graph. The overview is vague, and the lack of specific data points makes it difficult for the reader to understand the actual price changes. To improve, ensure you provide a clear, accurate summary of the trends and support your points with precise data from the graph.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks paragraphing, which makes it difficult to follow. There is no clear logical progression; the sentences are strung together without effective cohesive devices. You use some basic connectors like 'in addition', but the overall structure is disjointed. The referencing is often confusing, such as 'the first activities', which does not clearly refer to the metals mentioned. To improve, you should organize your response into an introduction, a clear overview, and body paragraphs that group information logically, using a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are several spelling errors, such as 'elucited' (elicited), 'adittion' (addition), 'flucation' (fluctuation), and 'comparisgen' (comparison). The word choice is often imprecise, such as using 'activities' to describe the metals. You rely on basic vocabulary that does not allow for a clear or sophisticated description of the data. To improve, focus on learning specific terminology for describing graphs, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'increased', and 'decreased', and ensure you proofread your work to correct basic spelling mistakes.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There is a lack of punctuation, making it difficult to identify sentence boundaries. You struggle with basic subject-verb agreement, such as 'Nickel appear to the highest' instead of 'Nickel appeared to be the highest'. The sentence structures are very simple and often incomplete. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct verb forms and punctuation, before attempting more complex grammatical structures.

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