Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph chart illustrates the average change in the amount of three metals during the period of one year.
Overall, Nickel's price is decline over a year and in Zinc first amount is increased and then amount is decreased over the year in addition Copper is also sight decreased.
Nickel's price is on the peaked in 2014 and amount was 6% increase in January. After that it decreased in June by -3 and then also increased in November by plus four and then it remained same in December.
Copper in January reported at plus two
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. Because the text is only 95 words long, the information is severely underdeveloped. While you attempt to identify some trends, the summary is incomplete and lacks a comprehensive overview of the data. Several months and key features are omitted, and the description of the trends is fragmented. To improve, you must ensure all parts of the prompt are addressed, including a clear overview and detailed comparisons of the three metals throughout the entire year, while meeting the minimum length requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response lacks a clear logical progression. While there is an attempt at an 'Overall' statement, the transition between ideas is abrupt and mechanical. The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'and then' to link sentences. Paragraphing is not effectively utilized to separate the introduction from the body of the report. To improve, focus on using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'subsequently', 'meanwhile') and organize your information into distinct paragraphs for better readability and logical flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'amount' and 'increase/decrease' throughout the text. There are also inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'sight decreased' (likely meaning 'slightly') and 'on the peaked'. The lack of variety in describing trends prevents a more precise analysis of the graph. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more specific vocabulary related to data trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'a marginal decline', or 'a significant surge', and ensure correct word forms are used.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'Nickel's price is decline' (should be 'is declining' or 'declined'), 'in Zinc first amount is increased' (awkward phrasing and missing articles), and 'plus four' (informal). The sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing full stops in some areas. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct tense usage for describing past data, and incorporating a mix of complex sentence structures to demonstrate grammatical control.
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