Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The line graph predicts the information about the average and monthly change prices in the three metals over a period, of 12 years.

Overall, the three elements was fluctuate in the beginning

zinc gradually inclined while copper and nickel are slightly

decreased.

To commence with, the nickel and zinc are inclined to f and between j to j declined. ,whereas copper are inclined j to d.

just near 1.5 and nickle almost 1 .

on the other hand, copper are dropped m and rise up to j .

and almost fluctuate end to end and grew up almost 1.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement. Furthermore, the content is underdeveloped and lacks a clear summary of the main features. The description of the data is fragmented and confusing, with abbreviations like 'j to j' and 'm' that are not explained, making it impossible for the reader to follow the trends. The response does not adequately compare the three metals or provide a coherent overview of the data presented in the graph. To improve, you must ensure you meet the length requirement and provide a clear, structured analysis of the key trends and comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks logical organization and progression. The paragraphing is ineffective, and the sentences are disjointed, making it difficult to follow the flow of information. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas, and the referencing is unclear. The use of punctuation is erratic, which further disrupts the coherence of the text. To improve, you should focus on using clear topic sentences for each paragraph and employing linking words (e.g., 'however', 'in contrast', 'subsequently') to connect your points logically. The current structure is too fragmented to support a coherent argument or description.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'nickle' instead of 'nickel' and 'inclined' used incorrectly to describe price movements. The use of abbreviations like 'j' and 'd' is inappropriate for an academic task. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey precise information about the graph. To improve, you should learn specific terminology for describing trends, such as 'fluctuate', 'decline', 'increase', 'peak', and 'plateau', and ensure you use them accurately in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the three elements was fluctuate'), incorrect verb tenses, and sentence fragments. The sentence structures are simple and often lack proper punctuation, making the text difficult to read. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures. To improve, you should focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and using correct verb tenses when describing past data. Proofreading for basic errors is essential to improve your score.

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