Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the proportion charging in price compared with previous month of three metals during 2014.
overall, the nickel starting proportion was highest while zinc was lowest changes, followed by copper was fluctuated.
in first, the nickel was start from 6% at first then decline rapidly around -3 in the month of jun. after Jun the nickel was slowly grew and reach consistently in end nearly by 1%. The copper was first at 2% . the coper was fluctuated . it is not rapidly down like nickel. The copper was reach in the end point under 2.5%.
The Zinc was in first month at 1% then increased significantly in second month around 3%, then sharply decline 4 month in jun this is more low. after Jun that is grew slowly and constant in 3 month July, Aghuest and septamber. the zinc dramatically growth again and peak the 2% the start and the ended change is in same point .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the graph but fails to provide a clear or accurate overview. The description of the trends is often confusing and inaccurate; for example, stating that nickel 'reached consistently in end nearly by 1%' is vague, and the description of zinc's movement is difficult to follow. While the response identifies the three metals, it lacks a clear comparison of the main features. The data points mentioned are often imprecise or incorrectly interpreted, which hinders the reader's ability to understand the graph's information. To improve, focus on identifying the most significant peaks, troughs, and overall trends rather than listing every minor movement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is limited and often mechanical or misused, such as 'in first' and 'after Jun'. The transition between ideas is disjointed, making the overall flow difficult to follow. Referencing is also problematic; for instance, the use of 'that is' and 'the coper' lacks clarity. To improve, use a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'subsequently', 'in contrast', 'meanwhile') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that connects logically to the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with frequent errors in word choice and collocation. Phrases like 'proportion charging in price' and 'more low' are non-standard and impede clarity. There are also issues with spelling and word formation, such as 'Aghuest' and 'septamber'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends accurately, relying on basic verbs like 'grew' or 'decline' without the necessary precision for a data-analysis task. Expanding your vocabulary to include trend-specific terminology (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'plummeted', 'stabilised') is essential for a higher score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often obscure meaning. There are consistent issues with verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and article usage (e.g., 'the nickel was start', 'the coper was fluctuated'). Sentence structures are simple and often lack proper punctuation, which makes the text feel fragmented. There is very little evidence of complex sentence structures, and when attempted, they are usually inaccurate. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that tenses are used consistently throughout the report.
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