Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given line graph illustrates the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
Overall there are three metals copper, neckel, and zinc form which nickel had a massive changes over the year.
There was 6% changes in nickel in the first month of 2014 next month which dropped to 4% followed by 1% in march and stood at in the following month. In may it decreased by 0.5% but in June it fell massavly and recovered in july from where it recovered continuesly and by the last month it had changes of only a ting fraction.
Furthermore, copper had 2% monthly change in the prices which dropped continuesly till June it was -0.5% and recovered to 1% in july and was constant next three months, till December monthly change in the prices was 1.5%.
Moreover, zinc had the leas changes in the prices in the month of January which rose in following month and dropped continuously for four months and stopped at -1% but, in July it rose by 0.5%. However, from July to September there was no change in the price of all three metals. Where as till December it had the highest changes among all, and noted at 2%
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response provides an overview and attempts to describe the trends for all three metals. However, the reporting of data is often inaccurate or vague, such as 'stood at in the following month' and 'a tiny fraction'. The description of the trends is confusing, particularly the claim that there was 'no change in the price of all three metals' between July and September, which is not supported by the graph. The summary lacks a clear focus on the most significant features, and the data points mentioned are frequently difficult to reconcile with the visual information provided. To improve, ensure that data points are cited precisely and that the overview highlights the most prominent trends rather than listing every minor fluctuation.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or misused, such as the transition 'Where as till December'. The progression of ideas is sometimes illogical, particularly in the final paragraph where the narrative jumps between metals and timeframes in a way that is difficult to follow. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the flow between sentences is frequently interrupted by grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus on one metal or a specific comparative trend.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors such as 'neckel', 'massavly', 'continuesly', and 'leas'. The word choice is often imprecise, for example, using 'massive changes' or 'tiny fraction' instead of specific numerical descriptions. There is little evidence of an attempt to use less common lexical items or precise terminology related to data description. To reach a higher band, you should work on spelling accuracy and incorporate more precise vocabulary for describing trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', 'peaked', or 'declined gradually'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but the accuracy is low. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement, tense usage, and sentence construction, such as 'there are three metals... form which nickel had a massive changes'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and run-on sentences. These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding of the data. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures and proofreading for common errors like subject-verb agreement and verb tense consistency before moving on to more complex grammatical forms.
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