Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given bar graph chart illustrates that the prices of diffrent metals in extent months during 2014.
Overall, It is clear form give chat nickle price was maximum while minimum can be seen in copper .
To begin with, 6% price of nickle was change in january .In next month this price was decresed by 2%. The cost of nickle in february, march, april, may, june , july, augest, september, october , november , december that was1%, 1%, 0.75%, -3%, -1%,-1%,-1%, -2%, 1%,1% Respectiely. In 2014 The minor diffrent cn be seen in the price of copper in january and december . The formal value was 2% and the latteral value was 1%.In first month of 2014, the price of zinc was 1% .In next month this price incresed to 2%. In July month this cost was nearly -0.50%and this price was some in augest, september . In december month the price of Zinc was 2%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the data, but it fails to provide a clear overview or effectively highlight the main features. The description of the data is largely a list of figures rather than a synthesis of trends. For instance, listing every monthly value for nickel is unnecessary and prevents the identification of key patterns or significant fluctuations. The comparison between metals is weak, and the report lacks a clear summary of the overall trends, such as which metal experienced the most volatility or the general direction of price changes. To improve, focus on grouping data points and identifying the most significant peaks and troughs rather than transcribing individual data points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by the repetitive listing of data. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'To begin with' and 'In next month', but they are often used mechanically or incorrectly. The transition between sentences is sometimes abrupt, making the text feel like a series of isolated statements rather than a cohesive report. The referencing is also unclear at times, such as the use of 'formal value' and 'latteral value' to describe copper prices, which is confusing for the reader. Improved paragraphing and more varied linking words would enhance the overall structure.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, often relying on basic terms like 'price' and 'cost'. There are several spelling errors, such as 'diffrent', 'nickle', 'decresed', 'augest', and 'Respectiely'. The use of 'formal' and 'latteral' to refer to the first and second values is an incorrect application of these terms in this context. While the student attempts to use some data-related vocabulary, the range is insufficient to convey the information with precision. To reach a higher band, the student should focus on using more varied verbs to describe trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'peaked', or 'remained stable', and ensure accurate spelling.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'price of nickle was change' and 'minor diffrent cn be seen'. Punctuation is inconsistent, particularly with the placement of commas and spaces. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as 'In 2014 The minor diffrent cn be seen in the price of copper in january and december . The formal value was 2% and the latteral value was 1%.' The frequent errors in basic grammar and sentence construction significantly affect the readability of the response.
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