Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The graph shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metal during 2014 three metal is copper nical and zinc

First of all disuss about the copper prices change montly januray 2% increase the price in feburary price is decrease 1% ,March price are decrease by 0.5% ,April price are same ,May price are decrease 1% ,june price are same ,July price increase by 1.5 % Aujust same september same october decrease by 0.5% november same December increase

Nical prices in january increase by 6% and continously 3 month decrease by 1% ,april same may decrease june price also decrease 3% ,july august september price are same october november decrease 0,5%

In january zinc price incrase by

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement. Furthermore, the response is incomplete, ending abruptly in the middle of a sentence. While the student attempts to describe the data, the report lacks a clear overview of the main trends and fails to make meaningful comparisons between the three metals. The information is presented as a fragmented list of monthly changes rather than a cohesive summary. Because the task is unfinished and the word count is well below the requirement, the response does not adequately address the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text lacks logical organization and progression. There is no clear paragraph structure, and the information is presented in a disjointed, repetitive manner. The use of cohesive devices is almost entirely absent, making the text difficult to follow. The transition between describing different metals is abrupt, and the lack of a concluding summary or overview further hinders the flow of information. The response reads more like a series of raw notes than a structured academic report.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'increase', 'decrease', and 'same'. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'nical' for nickel, 'februrary' for February, and 'aujust' for August. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends accurately or with any degree of sophistication. The student struggles to use appropriate terminology for data reporting, which restricts the ability to convey information clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical control is weak, with frequent errors that often impede communication. There is a lack of sentence variety, and many sentences are grammatically incomplete or poorly constructed, such as 'First of all disuss about the copper prices change montly'. Punctuation is inconsistent, and there is a lack of subject-verb agreement throughout the text. The student relies on simple, fragmented structures, and there is no evidence of complex sentence forms. These persistent errors make the writing difficult to read.

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