Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the proportion of average monthly change in the prices of three metals namely copper, nickel, zinc in 2014.
Overall, nickel was most expensive but prices declined steadily over the period. in addition, copper and zinc fluctuated in the given period.
Looking into the details, in January the price of nickel accounted for at 6%, while the rate of nickel declined constantly throughout the period and touched bottom line in June, by the end of December at 1%. Futhermore,.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under the 150-word minimum, which severely impacts the ability to fully address the task. While you have attempted to identify the main features, the response is incomplete and stops abruptly mid-sentence. You have failed to provide a comprehensive summary or make sufficient comparisons between the three metals. To improve, you must ensure you cover all parts of the prompt, including a clear overview and detailed supporting data for all categories mentioned in the graph. The current length prevents a full development of the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response lacks a clear structure due to its incomplete nature. While there is an attempt at an introduction and an overview, the lack of a proper body paragraph and the abrupt ending make it difficult to follow a logical progression. Cohesive devices are minimal; for instance, 'in addition' and 'furthermore' are used, but the text lacks the necessary flow to connect ideas effectively. To improve, ensure that each paragraph has a clear purpose and that ideas are linked using a variety of cohesive devices to guide the reader through the data.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'touched bottom line' and 'accounted for at' are inaccurate or unnatural in this context. There is limited evidence of the range required for higher bands, as the vocabulary is restricted to simple descriptions of trends. To improve, focus on using precise terminology for describing graphs, such as 'fluctuated', 'remained stable', or 'peaked', and ensure that collocations are used correctly. Expanding your range of descriptive adjectives and adverbs will also help to convey the data more accurately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are several grammatical errors, such as 'accounted for at 6%' and 'the rate of nickel declined constantly'. The punctuation is also problematic, particularly the use of a period followed by a comma after 'Furthermore'. The sentence structures are simple, and the lack of completion makes it impossible to assess your ability to use complex structures. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement. Ensure that you proofread your work to eliminate minor errors and practice using a wider variety of complex sentence structures to describe trends.
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