Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
Overall, it is clear average monthly change in prices of copper nickel and zinc 2014. The percentage other of months as a December March April may Jun and august changes in price compared with previous month.
On the one hand, January 6% nickel and February 4% and march decrease in other of months. The percentage of zinc percentage is very low zinc percentage in March 2% and April 1.5 percentage and Jun -1% the June percentage is very decrease. They are high percentage is nickel. The nickel percentage not compared copper and Zinc.
on the end hand of percentage of copper percentage July 0% and August -2%. Some month price zinc February 3% and October -1%. The December and November prices is same 1%. There are not high price other month and copper Nikcel zinc 7%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to provide a clear overview or accurately report the main features of the graph. The data presentation is highly fragmented and confusing, making it difficult to identify the trends for copper, nickel, and zinc. For instance, the mention of 'January 6% nickel' is unclear, and the attempt to describe fluctuations is hampered by poor data selection and lack of logical grouping. The response does not effectively compare the metals, and the information provided is often contradictory or unintelligible, such as 'The nickel percentage not compared copper and Zinc.' Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, as the reader cannot gain a clear understanding of the price changes from the text.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response lacks logical organization and progression. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the ideas within the paragraphs are disjointed and do not follow a clear structure. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the confusing use of 'On the one hand' and 'on the end hand'. The referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow which metal or month is being discussed. The lack of logical sequencing and the repetitive, mechanical nature of the sentences significantly impede the flow of information, resulting in a text that is difficult to read and understand.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'percentage', 'price', and 'month'. There is no evidence of a range of vocabulary appropriate for describing data trends (e.g., 'fluctuated', 'peaked', 'remained stable', 'declined'). The misuse of words and phrases, such as 'The June percentage is very decrease', indicates a lack of control over word choice and collocation. The vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information accurately, and the errors in word form and usage are frequent, which causes significant difficulty for the reader in interpreting the data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that distort meaning. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and even simple sentences are often poorly constructed or incomplete, such as 'Overall, it is clear average monthly change in prices of copper nickel and zinc 2014.' Punctuation is inconsistent, and there are numerous errors in subject-verb agreement and preposition usage. The frequent grammatical inaccuracies make the text difficult to follow and often obscure the intended meaning. The range of structures is very limited, and the errors are pervasive throughout the response.
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