Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The line graph illustrates the changes in prices of copper nickel and zinc in the year of 2014.

First of all we will talk about nickel, the price of copper starts rapidly decreasing from january to june but its starts rising from july,till september it became steady.In october there were a sudden drope in price as shown in given graph.Moreover in november and december the price were increases.Secondly the copper from the first month to the second the proportion increases and steadily decrease till 6th month, and from july till oct it remains still as we can see in given graph , there were sudden increase in the price from 8th month till 12th month.

To summerise the graph last element is remains the zinc the prices were starts rising from january and from february there were a still down fall depicts in the given line graph from feb till june and from july till september there is  steady flow in line as same as nickel and copper

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to describe the trends, but it fails to provide a clear overview or highlight the main features effectively. The description of the data is often confusing and inaccurate; for instance, the text claims to describe nickel but then discusses copper, and the chronological sequencing is difficult to follow. The report lacks a clear comparison between the three metals, which is a requirement of the task. Furthermore, the information provided does not accurately reflect the visual data in the graph, leading to a failure to present a clear summary of the main trends.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks logical organization. While there are paragraph breaks, the progression of ideas is disjointed and confusing. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often misused, such as 'First of all we will talk about' and 'Secondly', which are inappropriate for an academic report. The referencing is also unclear, as the writer frequently confuses the subjects (nickel vs. copper). The lack of a clear structure makes it difficult for the reader to follow the information presented.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'increases', 'decrease', and 'rising'. There are several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'drope' instead of 'drop' and 'summerise' instead of 'summarise'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe trends accurately or with any degree of sophistication. The student struggles to use precise terminology related to data description, which limits the clarity of the report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the price were increases'), tense consistency, and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or lack proper punctuation, making them difficult to parse. The range of grammatical structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. The lack of control over basic grammar significantly affects the readability of the text.

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