Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014 .Lets start summarise the information by selecting and reporting .
First of all Copper metal average monthly change in the prices during 2014 . In januarey price increase 2 percent ffrom the previous month ,next month price decrease 1 percent from previous month ,next month march price decrease again 0.5 percent , In the april price are stable like previous month ,,May and June price are decrease 1 percent and stable ,but July August and September price increase 2 percent and stable 3 month ,price decrease next month 0.5 percent and stable next month . and the last month of the year price increase 2 percent .
Now i discuss about the price of Nickel . The nickel price are decrease in Januarey by 2 percent or the next month again price are decrease 3 percent from previous month ,Next 2 months price are stable,In May price are decrease 3 percent from previous month and next three year price increase and stable on -1 percent , and next month price are decras
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to address the task by describing the data for copper and nickel, but it fails to cover the entire chart, breaking off mid-sentence while discussing nickel and omitting zinc entirely. Furthermore, the description contains numerous factual inaccuracies regarding the given data. For example, the student states that copper increased by 2 percent in January, whereas the graph indicates a 2 percent increase, but then states that prices decreased in subsequent months incorrectly. The response lacks an overview and fails to make meaningful comparisons between the metals. Therefore, this falls under Band 4.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The organisation and progression of ideas are severely impaired. The student includes conversational meta-commentary in the introduction, such as 'Lets start summarise the information by selecting and reporting' and 'Now i discuss about the price of Nickel'. Paragraphing is disrupted by abrupt breaks and an incomplete final sentence ('and next month price are decras'). Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, making it difficult to follow the logical development of information. The response does not achieve a coherent overall arrangement, resulting in a Band 4 score for cohesion and coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, heavily relying on words like 'price', 'increase', 'decrease', and 'stable'. There are numerous spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'januarey', 'ffrom', 'decras', and awkward phrasing like 'price are stable like previous month'. The student attempts some less common vocabulary related to data description, but these are handled with high inaccuracy. The range is limited and frequently strains the reader, corresponding to a Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text features a very limited range of structures, consisting mostly of simple, repetitive sentences joined or separated incorrectly. There are frequent, fundamental errors in subject-verb agreement and tense usage, such as 'price increase', 'price are stable', and 'next three year price increase'. Punctuation is faulty, including excessive commas and incomplete sentences, particularly at the abrupt end of the text. These errors frequently distort meaning, aligning with Band 4.
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