Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given line graph illustrates the fluctualtion in the three different metals during 2014 in percentage. Overall, the graph shows the percentage change in price compared with previous month.
To commence, in the first month of the year the price of copper and nicel was 2% and 6%, copper price was slightly decreased in next months, and got stable between May and June. Afterthat, rise in percentage in july and getting stable between july and september about 1%, and then slightly escalate in last month to 1.9%. Moreover, nickel percentage of price plummeted in mach about 1% and stable for next couple of months, and again it shows sudden decreased in their price about -3%. Additionally, all three metals price were stable between july to september, and again increase in december to 1%.
Furthermore, zinc price was changed in february about 3% and then decreased slowely to -1% in june, but in december zinc have highest percentage about 2%. As a result, all three metals shows fluctuation in their price every months during 2014.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to report the main features and trends of the graph, but the response suffers from numerous factual inaccuracies and misinterpretations of the visual data. For instance, the student states that nickel 'plummeted in mach [March] about 1%', whereas the chart shows nickel at +1% in March and dropping significantly later in the year. Furthermore, the description of general trends lacks precision and fails to draw clear overall comparisons between the three metals. The overview provided in the introduction is basic and merely restates the prompt rather than synthesizing the main trends. Consequently, the task is addressed only partially, placing the response at Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is divided into paragraphs, but the overall organization and logical progression are weak. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as 'To commence', 'Afterthat', and 'Moreover', which do not flow naturally to guide the reader through a data report. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the mechanical transition between sentences creates a disjointed reading experience. While paragraphs are attempted, the internal cohesion within paragraphs fails to establish clear relationships between the data points presented.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student demonstrates a limited range of vocabulary with frequent errors in word choice and spelling. Examples include 'fluctualtion' for fluctuation, 'nicel' for nickel, 'mach' for March, and 'escalate' used incorrectly for a monthly percentage value. Words like 'stable' and 'decrease' are repeated without much variation. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey basic ideas about rising and falling prices, noticeable errors in spelling and collocation cause some difficulty and prevent the score from reaching Band 6.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The text displays a limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and awkward coordination. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('all three metals price were stable'), missing articles, and run-on sentences joined by commas ('copper price was slightly decreased in next months, and got stable'). Attempts at complex structures often result in faulty punctuation and awkward phrasing. These frequent errors occasionally impede communication and restrict the score to a Band 5.0.
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