Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The graph shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during the 2014.

And especially there is a change in price compared to the previous months .Thre are the three types of the metals likely 1.copper,2.Nickel,3.Zinc, based up on these three metals there is a price difference in the year of 2014, First of all we can talk about the Copper in the january the copper price is 2 and compared to the frebery the price is lightly decreased by 1 and in march the price lighly decreaseing and compared to the last month december the price same when comapred to the january in the month june the copper price is all most decreased and the july raised full up to then the copper price is not decessed this is about the copper

And next metal is about the Nickel according to the three metal the Nickel have the highest price when compared to all the three metals the starting month of the year 2014 the month of january the price is 6 an doin the feberary the price is decreased by two it is 4 and the march the price is 1 so much decreased in the price in the month april and the may the cast is equal lightly diffrerence in the month of june cost of Nickel is so much decreased it is aroundly -3 that much is decreased in june in the june all the threee metals was decreased but the Nickel is all most decresed very much when compared to that two metals and in the july lightly grow to -3 to -1 it is little but goood and in august and sepetember its is good and dece,ber the price is comes to 1 it is also good this is about the Nickel metal

And the third metal is about the Zinc and the price of the Zinc in the year of2014 in january theprice is about the 1 but in the febrary the cost is lightly increased to the 3 and in the march it is decreased by 2 and there is loss in the month of june only there is loss in june for all the threee metals in the given graph in the july,august,sepetmber the cost id same in the months the price is 1 and in the decemeber the cost is 2

These is the information about the three metals in the given chat

According to that three metals the copper is better there is no loss and profit there is a some fixed range of the price in alll the months in the yaer of 2014

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The student attempts to cover the main trends in the graph, noting figures for copper, nickel, and zinc across the months of 2014. However, the response lacks a clear overview, which is essential for a Band 6 or above in Task 1. Furthermore, the descriptions of monthly fluctuations are often inaccurate, highly conversational, and difficult to follow (e.g., describing drops as 'loss' or stating incorrectly that all three metals had a loss in June). The attempt to compare the metals is superficial, and the data is frequently misreported. This places the response in the lower bands.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text suffers from severe structural issues. It is written as a continuous, rambling block with virtually no correct punctuation or sentence boundaries (using commas and run-on conjunctions like 'and' repeatedly). Paragraphing is chaotic, with irregular breaks that do not serve logical progression. Cohesive devices are either missing or repetitive and inappropriate ('First of all we can talk about...', 'And next metal is about...'). There is no clear logical progression or overview of information.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic, highly repetitive, and conversational ('so much decreased', 'price same', 'full up'). There are numerous word-choice and collocation errors throughout the text (e.g., 'cost is equal lightly difference', 'there is loss in the month'). The student attempts to use terms related to data trends, but these are handled inadequately and impede clear communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is extremely weak. The response consists almost entirely of run-on sentences joined by coordinating conjunctions ('and', 'but') without proper punctuation or capitalization. There is a complete lack of complex structures handled accurately. Basic subject-verb agreement and tense consistency are frequently violated (e.g., 'the copper price is 2 and compared to the frebery the price is lightly decreased'). Frequent errors obscure the meaning in multiple places.

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