Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)

Student answer (Band 4.5)

First of all ,this graph give the information about the price changes on monthly baise in year of 2014 of three diffrent mattal copper,nickel,zinc.

If we look this graph showing tha data on the X axis showing the price that is flactuated on monthly basis and on the Y axis showing the month from January to December.Firstly, its talking about Copper in jaunary it's price high by 2% and constant in May and July.The next one is about Nickel in january it's price increses 6% and in fab it's decreses by 2% and in March it;s become on 1% the continualy decreses from March to October in June it's price at tha lowest lavel -3% and in November and December incresed by 1%. if we talk about Zinc in Fab it's price Incresed 3% in in June it is lowest level -1% and again in December it's raised 2%.

This graph show the price flatuated of three different itims among different monthes

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student attempts to address the prompt by describing the monthly price changes of copper, nickel, and zinc in 2014. However, the response contains numerous factual inaccuracies regarding the data. For instance, the writer states that nickel decreased by 2% in February when the chart shows it went from 6% to 4%, and incorrectly swaps the axes by claiming the X-axis shows fluctuations and the Y-axis shows months. While some major features and trends are mentioned, such as nickel reaching a low of -3% in June, the overall presentation lacks a clear and accurate overview. Key data points are misread or confused, leading to an under-developed summary that falls into Band 5 descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response suffers from severe issues with paragraphing and cohesion. The entire text is essentially presented as a single run-on block of text without proper sentence boundaries or logical grouping. Basic punctuation is frequently omitted or misused, such as spaces before commas and run-on clauses connected improperly. Cohesive devices are minimal and repetitive (e.g., 'The next one is about', 'If we look this graph'). There is no clear logical progression or structuring of information, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended comparisons, aligning closely with Band 4 descriptors.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

Vocabulary usage is basic, repetitive, and plagued by spelling and word-choice errors. Words like 'baise' (basis), 'diffrent' (different), 'mattal' (metal), 'jaunary' (January), 'fab' (February), 'increses' (increases), 'decreses' (decreases), 'flactuated' (fluctuated), and 'itims' (items) demonstrate persistent spelling issues. The student attempts some less common vocabulary such as 'fluctuated' and 'constant', but inaccuracies in spelling and collocation strain the reader. This performance aligns with Band 4 descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on simple or poorly connected clauses that often lack verbs or subjects. There are frequent and systematic errors in tense, preposition usage, and sentence structure (e.g., 'this graph give the information', 'its price high by 2%', 'in March it;s become on 1%'). Punctuation is faulty throughout, and complex structures are either absent or constructed with severe errors that impede smooth reading. This corresponds to a Band 4 level.

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