Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 18 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average monthly change in prices of copper, nickel and zinc (2014)
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph below illustrate the average monthly fluctuate in the prices of different metals which includes, zinc, copper, and nickel.
To begin with, in the month of january copper prices was pacing at 2, than it started decreasing slightly during the month of febuary. Moreover it ramins constant in the months of march and april, however it decreased downwards in the month of may after that it remains stable till june.
Heading up to next, it raises rapidly in the month of july, furthermore it remians constant throughtout september. To continue with, it rose up in a rush by the end of the year.
Comming on to nickel, it was on 6 during the month of january and drastically decreased in the month of march at 1. At remain constant till august than slightly decreased in may, moving up to next again it decreased drastically during the month of june at minus 3, however it raised up to minus 1 thoughtout the month july, august and september.
On the other hand, zinc has raised up in the month of febuary to 3 than it was started decreasing till may and than rapidly falled in june and remians same throughout july, august, september and october. Finally it raised up in the month of november at 2.5 and moved and increased to 2 by the end of year.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the main features of the graph regarding the monthly percentage changes in prices for copper, nickel, and zinc in 2014. However, the student struggles significantly with the data. There are numerous inaccuracies and misreadings of the chart values and trends. For instance, the student states that nickel 'drastically decreased in the month of march at 1' and that it remained constant until August, which contradicts the graph where nickel fluctuated downwards through several months. Furthermore, the response lacks a clear overall trend or overview paragraph, which is essential for Academic Task 1. The reporting is a disjointed chronological narration of individual data points rather than a synthesised summary. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, earning a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs that separate the different metals, which provides some basic structure. However, there is a lack of overall progression, and the logical organisation is weak, largely due to the absence of an overview. The student attempts to use cohesive devices and transition phrases such as 'To begin with', 'Moreover', 'Heading up to next', and 'Comming on to nickel', but these are often unnatural, clunky, or misapplied in an academic context. Referencing and referencing pronouns are sometimes confusing, and the mechanical repetition of transitional phrases disrupts the flow of the text. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion within paragraphs is faulty. This performance aligns with Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling and word-choice errors. Words like 'illustrate' are used with incorrect grammatical agreement ('The graph below illustrate'), and common terms are misspelled repeatedly (e.g., 'january' as 'january', 'febuary' instead of 'february', 'ramins' instead of 'remains', 'throughtout', 'Comming', 'falled'). The student attempts some less common vocabulary related to trends, such as 'fluctuate', 'decreasing', 'constant', 'rapidly', and 'drastically', but these are often combined with inappropriate prepositions or used inaccurately to describe percentage changes (e.g., 'prices was pacing at 2'). The lexical range is limited and frequently strains the reader, corresponding to a Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 based on positive descriptors for minimally adequate task completion vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying primarily on simple sentences and basic compound structures linked with coordinating conjunctions. Attempts at complex structures are frequently faulty or ungrammatical, such as 'prices was pacing at 2' (subject-verb agreement and tense errors) and 'it was started decreasing'. There are persistent errors in verb tenses, capitalization, and punctuation throughout the response. For example, 'it ramins constant', 'it raises rapidly', and 'zinc has raised up'. These numerous grammatical errors cause noticeable difficulty for the reader and restrict the control of grammar to a Band 4.0 level.
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